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i hope the punishment wasn't to harsh... he's just settling into it after all and that role play was pretty mind blowing

ok I was spoiled you were updating every 3 days, what happen?? I want my smut thank you!!

LOL LOL LOL LOL

Love the story BTW

I like the contract, but the last chapter before it it seems like Snape and Malfoy are getting so... pampering with Harry. like, there isn't much to their actual D/s relationship other than harry bottoms. I hope you can assert the D's into their roles a little more, I'm just feeling a little bored perhaps?

Other than that the lemon has all been quite yummy, and like i said I like the contract. I think it was a good idea to look up BDSM contract examples

Love the addition can't wait to see more. Will Draco and Severus find out about Harry's past with the Durselys?

Can't wait for more

Not bad it should be interesting but need more.

Hi! I just wanted to let you know that you're doing a good job with this story. As far as cheating (due to looking up the contract) honestly, I think of that as research and not cheating in the least. Those contracts exist for a reason between the two parties to let everyone know where they stand. You did a great job of it. One thing though, and this is silly when I think of it, but when referring to Dominate/submissive the latter (the submissive) is always in lower case form. A Dominate shows their position even in wording and by having both with capital beginning letters (i.e. D/S or Dominate/Submissive, etc...) you are giving the submissive equal footing as the Dom. Language, as they say, is power and your Dominates are giving it away (something I can't see them doing) if you don't use the correct forms or titles. A good book to read about the lifestyle is "The Loving Dominate". I can't recall who wrote it, but it can be found in any bookstore in the Sexuality section. I hope this helps. Thanks for sharing and I hope you update soon.

it's not cheating, its research and a perfectly valid thing to do when writing on a subject you aren't sure of. Kudos.

I originally wasn't sure how I was gonna feel about this... LoL, thats not a bad thing. I really liked the first story, I love lemons. I'm happy that you are continuing the story like this. I like the how well you write first person from Harry's POV. Aside from some spelling errors, and some punctuation thingies that stuck out and poked me in the face, its fabulous.

Oh, some of the paragraphs kinda run together a little bit. They need like the space between them to be easier to read. *nods* ^_^ You did it most of the time it's just occasionally like you were all excited by what you were typing and didn't press the enter key enough. *nods* I totally do that allllll the time! ^_~ Um. Yeah, but I really like this and I'll be watching for an update!!

Love,

Rose @~*~

PS. If you ever need someone to throw ideas at, you should totally email me! rscreighton@gmail.com! ^_~ I know sometimes I need someone to bounce things off of. Keep up the great work!!

Ah, how pretty! I love it still. The contract is correct in my eyes for such a story. However, i was wondering...Harry doesnt really act the part of a complete submissive for this level of relationship. Perhaps you would consider toning his rebellious independence down a bit?