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for Proper Revenge

by Nathalia

person What?
schedule February 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
what the hell happened to this? What's with the html stuff?
schedule October 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
The girls definately needed "proper punishment". This is a very HOT storyline.

Tell us what is happening with Marietta too. Has Neville "buried himself in her" yet?

I await your next chapter with bated breath!
person tafod-y-sarff
schedule December 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
> no Hogwarts student would be as sexually active as they are frequently portrayed

Ahh, the innocence of youth! I have some very clear recollections from way back when I was under seventeen. Be assured, neither youth nor strict rules stopped me and my classmates from getting up to plenty of mischief (and we didn't even have magic). I have no doubt that Hogwarts pupils do the same. (Gang-rape in the RoR is, admittedly, a bit of a stretch...unless the students involved are the ones whose ambition for after they graduate is to join the Death Eaters.)

That said, this is a very original premise. I would like to see the DA blokes act more in character, though: don't you think it would be interesting to try to imagine how Neville, for example, would react to such a situation (not letting his moral scruples get in the way, of course). The way that you connect Harry's willingness to join in to his anger over a lot of the recent events is a good excuse for OOC-ness - why not try and come up with rationales for the other blokes, too? It would also be potentially entertaining to see them all join in, but each with his own thoughts, motivations, and behaviour, to reflect the differences in their personalities (to the extent to which that is possible). Go for it!
person Dark Dragen
schedule November 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Good start mate, I can't wait to see what you have planned next PLEASE update soon