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Yes, it's very good. So very few fics have it and it's so hot! Guys and ass play rarely mix so I guess that translates to people not writing it either which is a shame because it's so hot. Same with eating their own cum. Not much hotter than having a guy go down on me after dropping a nice big creamy load in/on me, but again not many people write about that. It's such a shame really. Though it's harder in the real world to find a guy who will let me fuck him with a strap on or eat his own load than it is to find stories about it. I'm trying to get a friend to write one but he keeps saying he isn't a good writer. I'll get him eventually though!
Anyway, keep up with your fic, it's great. And damn that Dumbledore for screwing with Harry's head. I hope Bella finds out then sneaks into the school to set things right. Then maybe up to the Room of Requirements for some fun time...Ah god I'm so horny right now...I gotta go take care of this before I soak my chair.
Toodles!!

I just read ch 18-20 and I must say that your story keeps getting better and better...I have been away for a week so that's why I have been reviewing...sorry xx

MORE BELLA FUCKING HARRY UP THE ASS!!!!

Very good so far! Can't wait for the next chapter!

I am sorry I haven't reviewed in ages...I have been having counselling 2 days a week and visiting job agencies

I do love this story and it's the story I always look for when I come on this site

More please xxx

Bravo. This is an intereting premise, and so far it's going in a great direction.
J.

You asked for reviews, so I'm giving mine. The story line is interesting; I don't think I've seen one like it. Seeing where you're going with this plot keeps me reading. And here we come to the "BUT," as in "I like this, but..."
Your grammar isn't as bad as some I've seen on this site and others, but this story is good enough to deserve better. Find yourself a beta. And when I say that you should find a beta, I don't mean that you should have a friend to read it over and tell you how wonderful your story is. A beta should be someone who will correct spelling and grammar, and be able to tell you why those changes are necessary. A good beta is also someone that you can talk to about story ideas. A good beta is an honest voice: he or she will tell you that a plot twist isn't working, and also tell you what you are doing right. A good beta can help make a good story into a great story. Do yourself a favor and take advantage of the betas on this site. If you do, you will be far more satisfied with both this story, and your own writing.

I like your story so far,and Im trying to figure who is going to switch sides.Keep up the good work.

Great chapter...I cannot wait to see how Hermione and Draco act around each other xxx

Can't wait to read the next chapter. Keep up the great work!
J.