rate_review Reviews

Thanks for the reviews, all are appreciated, a bit of criticism never hurt anyone!

Did anyone mention that you would be well served to have a skilled and patient beta look at your work? I made it through both chapters because I'm intrigued by the plot thus far, but normally such a proliferation of spelling, punctuation, and grammar errors would have forced me to stop long before the end of the first two paragraphs.

This piece certainly has potential. A little attention to mechanical detail would go a long way in silencing other complaints, as well.

keep going!! hope the next chapter comes out soon!!!

Im enjoying your writing style. Good description, good dialog, its got real promise.

Interesting beginning, I gotta say you have me wanting more.
And I love the part about Draco pulling a Cruel Intentions move.
I can absolutely picture that happening.

Interesting start., Wonder where it will go! I do think it's a bit teenage angsty? Not my favorite personally,. but I think this really has potential. I would advise you to try to avoid stereotypes though., I'm not sure since it's just the first chapter but first impressions are everything! Goodluck with your writing!