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I like the idea, Lucius stalking Hermione at a young age is kinda twisted but could make a good story. If it's the beginning of 6th year she's almost 17 according to canon though, not 15. Also you should think about a beta to help with your grammar, things like not capitalizing people's names make your writing seem quite childish. I hope you don't think I'm being harsh, I'm just trying to help because I think the idea has potential.

It's interesting, that's for sure. If you have problems, I'd recommend a good word processing program and a beta, that generally does the trick for me!

great start looking forward to reading more

I commend you for giving writing fanfiction a try. As you said, this does need work, but it's nothing that you can't see to yourself. First of all something that you may not like hearing, go to summer school if you can. This can only benefit you. There you can learn the grammar and, perhaps even, some of the spelling you need to know. Take in your story idea and even what you've worked on to that point. It would be your project as it were and it will make learning that much more enjoyable. Next, and please don't get upset by me asking, but did you read the books or see the movies? If you haven't read the books, do so. Even if you have, do so again. The reason I'm saying this is two fold. One, you'll become familiar with some spelling, but proper grammar as well. And the second reason is that it will help you to get to know the characters better. You have a good idea here, but your characterization needs work. By getting to know the characters better, you will be able to write about them better as well. Even what they might write in a letter can be influenced by what you know or think you know about them. Check them out from the library or if you own them great, but either way do try to read them. You also might want to consider researching. Go to Wikipedia and read up about the different stories, characters, plots, etc... This again can only help, as it will give you a firmer understanding of the world you are writing about. Good luck and remember never give up. The only bad things are giving up or never trying at all.