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This is a good one.. I can't wait for more..

But I don't tink you need to write the signature looks and stuff of all the potter children everytime. Unless there is a special reason for it!

I like the story, but I think you need a beta or should proof-read once you've written the chapters. You miss out a lot of standard punctuation, which dusrupts the flow of the story. Also, the character descriptions aren't really necessary. Show what they look like, what their wands are like, in the story, rather than tell us at the end. It's a lot better, and people aren't likely to skip it if you subtly add in bits about the character throughout the course of the story. At least, for me, I completely skipped the character profiles - they just don't appeal. Other than that, the story is really good. You write Harry's angst very well - it's not horribly overdone, and seems to be in character. At least he's not turned dark and began hating everyone and everything and turns to Voldemort or anything non-sensical like that, he's just sad no-one likes him. I hope he makes friends! Hope you continue soon!

Hello,
I like this story and want to know what will come next.

I must say that something is bothering me, and I saw the exact same mistake in other stories.
You write that Lily is : Evans n

oh my gosh u have to update this soon i love it and i feel so sad for harry. i was really sad to see the end of chapter 3 i wanted more, so please update soon

hope you update all your stories soon

Ummmm... it's a little ridiculous to have his brother and sister feel outraged at him saying that he'd never met them and they'd never visited him, when they themselves should know that they hadn't. I know this style of story usually tries to write everything in extremes. Harry is as abused as possible, people around him are as uncaring as possible, life is as miserable as possible, everyone is as irrational as possible in their condemnation of Harry, etc. But sometimes logic must prevail.

i hope you update soon it sounds really good

so horrible!! please update soon. they are assholes for abandoned him.

Poor Harry.
But why are the Potters being so mean. Wouldn't Lily talk to Petunia about Harry?
To find out why Harry supposedly doesn't like them? Stupid people, the lot of them.
And why are the Ravenclaws shunning him. They're supposed to be the SMART house.

so sad .i really hope the potters find out what is happening to harry. and i hope that harry gets the love that he needs . i can not wait for the next chapter. please write more soon.