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now i think you need to add a small bit about the fact the house elves bath the children and change them which is why no one saw harry's scar, in chapter 1.

god, poor harry! i hope his situation gets better soon and he fights back or he gets rescued!

Poor Lucas! His Family is so MEAN! He's a child THEY FORGOT!

One thing I liked about your other stories was that while they were angsty they were also at least plausible. These last two chapters make no sense and you offer no real explanation for everyone's intense and continuing hostility toward Harry/Lucas, especially from the family members who know damn well that yes in fact they did forget Harry at the Dursleys and now are showing no interest in his life there at all. It seems that you didn't really think this through, you just wanted to make him suffer as much as possible before the 'big reveal'. Your werewolf story is much more promising and your original and child of azkaban and even owned husband stories have more original premises. I hope you'll turn back to those soon.

I think your going a bit too far to the melodramatic route. Everybody hates him, nobody cares, every single adult in his presence is just that immature. It's extremely unrealistic and it tends to be the problem with this type of story. Every author so wants Harry to be the perfect abused Gar Sue that they completely disregard reality. Personally, I'd take a step back and try to find that reality again. Not EVERY single person is going to hate him, treat him like crap, ignore him, etc.

i love it

It is Daily Prophet not Profit.........and you have some other errors but that can be taken care of by just rereading your work....
Anyways I like the story...but I wish that you made it a bit more realistic.. Everyone cannot hate him make him have a friend at least or there will be no hope for him to be anytime of semi-well adjusted adult.
Please update this story and the rest of your stories soon.......I like you writing (sans the mistakes)

Its an interesting story, but it's going too fast. In the 4 chapters you've written, i cant tell if it's your writing style or you're skipping over his younger years to get to the more action-filled mid-teen age. If that is the case, perhaps you should have started there and explained his past in a series of choice flash backs and explanations. Anyway, I'm looking forward to the actual story part of this story ^^ hope you get there soon.

Poor harry. i hope he finds someone to love in the end. And maybe he will have a happy adult life, probably teaching all those people a thing or two. ugh, i hate everyone, except harry, in this story. : (
update soon please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

love the story want the next chapter up soon or if i could get an email when you next update would be good too its different bwl story and that good can't wait to see what the pairing is going to be latter and who is it though is what i want to know but hope the next chapter is longer though and this is the first one that ive seen in revan cal (sp) instead of slystherin is were i thought you were going to put him but hope you continue the story