rate_review Reviews

I really like this story. It's intriguing. Please keep writing? =D

Hi Jessy! I noticed you have written a story! I must say, I was flattered to see that you were using my claim spell in it. That was great, I really enjoyed that! It made me feel proud, that someone likes something I did so much that they decide to use it themselves.

Just a little comment, you should space the dialogue out a bit. It is common to skip a line whenever a different person starts to talk; it makes the story easier to read.