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for The Debt

by Daktalakpak

schedule April 24, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Try not to take this as a flame but as constructive criticism. This really, really needs a beta. It's kind of hard to read. There are a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes. You said earlier in the story, that you tried to clean it up, well, it needs more than that. It's good, I liked where you were going with this, it was just hard to read because of the mistakes. So, next time, get a beta, someone who can help look over your work and fix any mistakes.
schedule July 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM
damn she's not right in the head. This could get her expelled.
schedule July 2, 2011 at 12:00 AM
ut oh. now who grabbed him... and she didn't even give him a chance to explaine.
schedule June 18, 2011 at 12:00 AM
As long as you can control the main over view and nudge thme in your semi planned dierection, it should be fine. let them go and do what they want. Who knows, could be fun yeah? ^^
schedule June 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Heh, you asked for it Draco. ^^
I'm glad the Gryffs din go all 'raaaaaaaaaaargh' on him.
Still what about Heirs and all. Malfoy at least will be expected to provide one.
schedule June 4, 2011 at 12:00 AM
ohhhhhh, considering Draco's earlier tone, this sounds ominous.
schedule May 28, 2011 at 12:00 AM
kudos on getting it done then... and more importantly published for the reading of us. ^^
person SParker
schedule May 28, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I knew this story looked familiar. It HAS been
awhile. Good to see you're finishing it. :-)

...and I'm still wondering if a debt still exist.
schedule May 21, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Nah, half the time the characters almost seem to wonder off and do their own thing, dragging you along for the ride. Still, it's fun finding out where you end up. ^^
schedule May 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
oh,scary. Draco's got a stalker.