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YEP i love this chap... actually i love this whole story... so insightful meeting at the ministry... not many people like draco but given his past? i am glad that hermione stuck up for him and i am glad that she talked the others into looking into dracos case.... what a great scene with the flour.. wow they do have some sexual tension, i am so glad that she said that he could be her boyfriend in the future you can tell that there are feelings there... and oohhh draco was talking dirty to her wow that was definitely hot... i can not believe that harry wanted to 'talk' to her can he not take no for an answer... i am sure he will love that hermione and draco are in a relationship or getting there, when he does find out... poor narcissa i bet she will be happy when she wakes to see her son but she has to play a part... i hope he stays with hermione.... i mean he could stay at the manor but people will be looking around i think it would be better for him to stay with hermione and better for their sexual tension... oh on the mystery side of this i was thinking and looking back at the meeting at the ministry is it possible that someone in ministry has framed draco i mean they can be corrupt as well did dumbledore die on the tower like in the book or how did he die? i think that one of those ministry officials could have set up draco? ok well i am looking forward to your update... great job i just love this story

first off i have to say that i really like this story my heart has gone out to drado and i hope that hermione can do whatever to free him... second i love non canon stories while authors that write canon do a fab job i also admire the non canon bc it plays a little more with the imagination so please keep going i am on to chap 2

ok i have to say i love the way you are writing hermione and draco very good.... things that i loved in this chap... when he is in his cell and hears wings he goes to look out the window and sees a giant chicken... i am sorry that is just funny i am laughing now as i type this review... oh and when he is like ... buttcrack... buckwheat that was good

Great fic. I love that you've written Draco with humor and not dark.

Hermione is great in this story not a total nerd. But smart.

Love the bit of sex made me tingle. more please.

OMFG! you added my request. Vrey cute. Thank you.
Hermione catching Draco in the bath rapping to Ja Rule is priceless.
Great sex teaser. Need more.
Keep writing.

Chapters 1-3: Hmm...Hermione giggles too much. Perhaps, you can vary the words and she might laugh or grin instead? Draco yelling at the TV like a lunatic is hilarious! The part with Harry is shocking! I mean, at least Hermione realizes it's a mistake, but Harry just keeps on hoping...which is BAD of him--especially because a) he's married and b) he has children. I hope Hermione will tell Narcissa that Draco is all right. If she thinks that her son is dead, it can lead her to an early grave! Wouldn't it've been better if as the day goes on, Hermione fakes knowledge that Draco escaped? For example, when she ran into Luna, she should've said something along the lines that she heard from Pansy that Draco escaped? I wonder if it's recorded that Hermione visited Draco the day before he escaped...I enjoyed reading this story so far and I hope you'll update again soon! =)

I think the main things you need to work on in terms of grammar is punctuation. Most of the time, you don't seem to punctuate the dialogue and omit the much needed commas (,). You also mix up tenses--be careful about not reverting back and forth between present and past tenses.

Missing punctuation in a dialouge, changes in brackets []:
Draco looked confused.
[new paragraph] Hermione gasped[,]

Amazing story so far! Draco is priceless! I love it! Can't wait to read more! Take you're time! Can't rush genius!!! ^^

This is awesome. keep up the good work.

I just started reading & the story seems great! There are some grammatical errors, but you have a beta now. I hope you continue with this story - I really want to see where thing are going!

lol draco watching movies was great...laughing hystarically.