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That was a great chapter. I'm glad you found a way to get her the job. And I forgot to mention earlier that I absolutely love the name you chose for her son. Lysander definately suits her style. And thanks for explaining what happened with Ron. Stupid prick. So, Lucius found her huh? Can't wait to see where that leads! Great story. Please update again soon

Chapter 10: Congrats on your race and of course I want to see the sweaty pink fairy. The sports bra thing sounds ouchy, though.

Oh dear, Snape as a monk? Why don

The abortion issue

OK, I must admit I skimmed a lot of that because Remus and Narcissa don't interest me all that much. When I first read the whole 'a look into the Lupin/Black residence' I was like "oh she lied, there is more slash, maybe that's what she meant about hand holding, yay Remus and Sirius are so hot together and so meant for each other .... oh wait. I forgot about the whole Narcissa thing didn't I" lol.

Oh yeah, if you wan't, I think the dyslexia might have kicked in with your spelling of the word "Chaos", you have "Kayos" and I don't know if that's some form of alternate spelling or if it means something totally different or not because I must admit I've never seen the word before, but spell check doesn't have an issue with it, so I'm presuming you meant chaos. lol.

So yeah looking forward to more!

~gorgeousbowneyes

wonderful update!! poor severus.....thats a harsh punishment he received. i wonder if hermione will help him once remus asks for the potion ingredients. we are getting closer to hermione and lucius discovering who each other is.....can't wait!!! keep up the awesome job!!

I'm really digging the Hermione/rape/baby subplot, because it has the ring of truth to it.

I didn't quite realize why Severus was in pain--poor, poor man. It sounds horribly lonely. Maybe Lucius will support Hermione financially and she'll invent a potion to cure him? (For the unrealistic happily ever after version, where everyone decides not to ostracize Lucius and Hermione anymore because they save the world or some such rot.)

I just figured Lucius and Hermione would accidentally identify each other at Remus and Narcissa's wedding. But Lucius being somewhat attached to "Juliet" and tracking her down is a lot more interesting. Plus apparently it's fall now so they'd have to wait for almost a year.

Why is it their last performance together? Did they specify no more bookings after that month to the manager? I'm sure there's still great demand for them by word of mouth.

Oh, love the glass bathtub. And the lame "ambrosia" excuse to avoid the nasty champagne.

summarized-->> surmised

RUN AND RUN YOU SHOULD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Nah, just kidding, although I am a rather angry Snape fan. But I'm not angry at YOU, I'm just kinda all upset about Snape's predicament in this. Poor thing. I was kinda lost as to what had happened to him, I couldn't remember if you'd already talked about how he'd gotten nerve damage like that and I'd just forgotten or if it was actually meant to be slightly confusing. I figured that after Lucius and Snape had their little thing, and went back to face their mistakes that something happened to Snape and then you confirmed this by saying crucio's directed at his genitalia yadda yadda yadda and I was just like awwww poor Snape can't have sex anymore that's no good. He'll just have to be a bottom and take it like a man .... errr yeh man. But I know I know, he's not gay. Sorry.

I'm hoping Harry will have a little more presence in this story. I know you said he wouldn't be with Draco, and that you like to put him with OMC's ... but I had a kinda wonky thought that maybe him and Kingsley ...? But even if you don't put a pairing in for Harry, it'd still be good to see some interaction with him and Hermione. Does anyone know what Hermione does to make money? Say like how Lucius has told Severus, has Hermione perhaps told Harry? And what role does Ron play in all of this? Is he friends with Hermione and still supporting her as a good friend? Does he perhaps have unrequited love for her? But can't thinks he can't acknowledge it because of the stigma about her, and therefore has basically lost her.

And Lucius wants to meet the real her. Well I wonder what he would think if he found out that Juliet was Hermione and what pre-conceived ideas he has about her because of the press? I pray he's not a sheep like the rest of the community and believe what those silly reports say about her, and I don't think he would because he's a Death Eater previously, and would have had people talking about him and scorning his name as well. Really, it is a good match in that sense.

Ahh look, my imagination has run away with me again. I'll leave you to the writing, and hope my thoughts on the matter have been an interesting read if nothing else :P

~gorgeousbowneyes

PS when you're done with this story, I think you mentioned you had another Lucius/Hermione with more slash in it planned, but I'd encourage you to try your hand at a totally slash pairing story, even if it's just a one-shot PWP style thing, I think it would be worth it for you to try some HP M/M pairings. I always find pushing yourself into an area that's a little out of your comfort zone is good for improvement in writing styles (And this is a totally different subject, but as I was writing that I realised that "Out Of The Comfort Zone" was the title of my very very first HP fanfiction - a silly little Ron/Hermione then Hermione/Draco that I never finished, lol.)

Daisy had me laughing my head off! I think I encountered her not long ago. I was sitting, waiting for my train, minding my own business, when this girl walked up to me, looking me very serious in the eye. "I know what your ring means." Congratulations. You managed to read a book, or probably just watched the movie. Now what? I get the occasional pick-up line or a wink, but not usually from just-out-of-school-girls. Most of the few people who even notice have manners! "I want to get into the porn industry." WTF!!!! I was quite rude to her. I have no such connections, nor do I want such connections. And I certainly don

I love this story. I was a bit cautious at first, but after I few updates I was quite into the whole plot. It's really quite clever and has more depth than one might think. I do so hope that you will update soon. =]
Oh! And well done on the Race for Life, a few of my friends also participated in one close by, and it's all for a very worthy cause.

- Jos