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for To Enchant a King

by LadyVoldemort87

schedule May 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Keep going Doll, you know you can count on me to keep reading. =)


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SG
person Tygerlily
schedule May 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow! I am hooked already and its only the first chapter. I really enjoyed this.

Narcissa and Sirius being Hermione's siblings also looks like it'll have interesting possibilites. I am curious though about Narcissa having been sent to get the King. Curious as to the wheres and whys of that one. Also the King being married has me wondering and a bit concerned for Hermione. It'd be interesting to see how she does as only his mistress and as the story progresses would that change [at the minute I'd hope so lol]

Either way I'm really enjoying this and I really hope to see more appear soon!

schedule May 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I love it when HP characters are placed outside of JK'S world! Fantastic job! xoxo
person bzbabe
schedule May 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is really, really good so far. It reminds me of The Other Boleyn Girl. I can't wait for you to update soon. :)
schedule May 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Great plot, I was thinking about the Tudors/other Boelyn girl when I was reading it. Good job, please continue!!
person Pallas
schedule May 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It's nice to see how you turned this fascinating piece of history in a story. However, you could have made it more interesting or more true to the HP series if it had been a magical court... I feel like you have missed a great opportunity there; an opportunity to let your readers see how creative you could have been, mixing history with the HP universe and turning it into a whole new, titillating story... Now it's not much more than changing a few names here and there and giving the story a predictable storyline and a happy ending for the couple (instead of a beheading/exile).

I hope I'll be proven wrong as the story continues... I have good hopes that it will be more creative than the first chapter!

Pallas

person mariteri
schedule May 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I like it. It's an interesting twist. Will they have magic at all or doing a combination of the Harry Potter universe with the Other Boelyn Girl? True, Lucius is arrogant enough to act like Henry VIII but the conbination could be a tricky on to work out. I wish you luck with it if that is the case. I look foward to reading more soon.
person Jesse
schedule May 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
hmm. I do like this! although I am curious to where you will go with this. You appear to be taken inspiration from Henry VIII and Anne Boyelyn, but will you actually kill Hermione/Anne? Just curious: it won't affect whether or not I continue to read it, I'm just curious.
person nikkuman
schedule May 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really love this story; it's very unique and refresh, not all "Lucius has me prisioner and were eventually going to fall in love"; which is finem I've read so many (and, guiltily admit, written a few).

One small mistake: Narcissa addresses Lucius as "Your Grace". This is how you address a duke, not a king
Just thought you otta know
schedule May 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is freaking awesome! I can't wait for more!!