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Such a sweet chapter

I am glad that Hermione told Severus, but he is acting like a complete idiot, accusing her of getting pregnant on purpose and then him saying that he doesn't want to be a father. I hope that he will somehow be persuaded to give his family a chance. I think it would be great if Alyson and the new baby could get to know him and have a father that loves them unconditionally. I look forward to reading more soon.

awwwwwwww :)

cant wait for more, im really enjoying this story!

I think it is pretty good for a first fic. The only thing you might want to watch out for is how quickly you sprint from one substantive point to the other. For example, Hermione stopped speaking to friends, had a baby, returned to Hogwarts, got pregnant, and started teaching without us knowing her whys or hows. As a writer, you want to tell us that she entered the room. As a reader, I want to know whether she stumped her feet as she yanked open the door or did she stroll into the hall expecting all eyes to be on her.

I never finished my first fic. I have a so so incomplete first draft of the next fic. Just keep spitting out your ideas. Over time, you refine them. Surprisingly, you will do better than you expect.

very interesting. She only slept with Snape twice, and got pregnant both times...i love it. Can't wait to read more.

Nice chapter... can't wait for more, it was well written.

That mean snape how dare he, don't keep him away to long.

Great post, love the story, can't wait until you post again, so please post again soon. Thanks.

It's good, Needs more.

Great post, love the story, can't wait until you post again, so please post again soon. Thanks.