rate_review Reviews

Hi, me again LOL....great premise, but a bit rushed...as a reader I like to be filled in on the "between" even if its just a snippet, otherwise the story feels like it has holes in it to me. I think you have great potential, but perhaps fleshing it out a little more would help. Great premise, great plot for a first fic too. Keep practicing and writing!

happy writing
SG

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

Not too bad for a first story. But for readers who do not care for OOC characters, it probably isn't the best. I admit to generally preferring stories where the characters stick pretty much to how JKR portrayed them, even if the storyline doesn't, but this was pretty good. Keep up the writing and the posting. If you ever want to write professionally I would suggest developing a deeper plot and characterizations, though. But I'm told once the first story has been posted, posting others becomes easier. So good job and I hope to see more from you in the future.

Wonderful!

This was an excellent story. I loved how it ended with the sorting of their youngest child.

Thank you for a brilliant story, it has been great spending time with you:-))

Great post, love the story, can't wait until you post again, so please post again soon. Thanks.

Another great chapter. I look forward to reading the next chapter.

surely you meant ' i am NOW proud..." right? love the story. it was sooo sweet.!

I like it. Please update soon.