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March 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I hope that Hermione will be alright. I look forward to reading more.
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March 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Whoa! That took me by surprise for sure. I wonder if it was Ron who hit her on the head, he is being such a git and Percy is playing him like a fiddle. I was thinking she was raped or something but I could be wrong. I love how Ruthie knows when Severus is being called and is hurt she has a real knack for that stuff. Makes me wonder if she got a bit of seer in her. Fabulous Story I look forward to reading more.
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March 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm fascinated by your story, and am happy to see such frequent updates. In particular, I'm delighted and surprised that Ruthie's connection to Snape doesn't seem to be that she's his daughter, but that as an innocent, she can heal him. I think it's a refreshing twist, and look forward to seeing what comes next!
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March 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
this is great. i really like it. please post soon.
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March 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
If that is Ron in Hermiones rooms, hitting her, I want you to neuter him with a toothpick.....
And please, whoever it is, don't let him rape her, I hate it when evil-doers sucess in their actions.
Update again soon!
And please, whoever it is, don't let him rape her, I hate it when evil-doers sucess in their actions.
Update again soon!
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March 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I love the interaction between Ruthie and Severus....Hermione hurt?? I wonder if Ruthie will tell her new best friend...great work..update soon xx
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March 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Another good chapter. Can you explain why Ron and harry are there over the summer? I would have expected them to be at #12.
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March 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
oh intriguing. Who is the father...? Buh buh buhuhuhuh. If you have a mailing list for updates please put me on it. Nellie
noonienoodles@yahoo.com.au
noonienoodles@yahoo.com.au
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March 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Good job on ch 3. You forgot to do your spacing during dialogue on ch 4. Try adding more narrative. Tell me what they're feeling, thinking. If you need help email me. I'm happy to help someone who actually wants to get better at writing. I'm working on my own project right now so I can't beta but I can give pointers if you want. Keep trying and don't get discuraged.
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March 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This was great. I hope that Hermione can manage to avoid Ron so that she doesn't get hurt. I started thinking about how you said Ruthie is 2yrs old, but if she was born in August after Hermione's 5th year, then she wouldn't be that old, if Hermione is just starting her 7th year, right. For Ruthie to be 2years old, Hermione would have had to of gotten pregnant during Christmas of her 4th year. I still love this story and look forward to reading more soon.