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for Forbidden Union

by alientheet

schedule July 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Wow. Can't wait to read more. The "&" instead of regular and proper "and" in the first paragraph looked childish and maybe a little illiterate. I would change that to make it read smoother and look more presentable.
schedule July 24, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I'll be. The plot thickens.
schedule July 24, 2010 at 12:00 AM
When does he get found out and who will he feed from? I just remembered in a previous chapter in a sex scene between Blaise and Draco there was a really long paragraph. It should be cut. It was so thick I just skimmed it. You may want to cut it in half to make it easier on the reader's eyes.
schedule July 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I didn't expect this plot line. Very original with the marriage of Draco to another person before he falls for Harry.
schedule July 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Now we're getting to the good part!
schedule July 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
A new life and new senses!
schedule July 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Nice sex scene.
schedule July 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Severus showing concern for a fellow Slytherin! How pleasant of him.
schedule April 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Soooo need chapter 12!!!
schedule April 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I very much enjoyed this :D