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for The Cold

by RaveXTM

schedule December 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Woah...that was an abrupt ending. The story was good, but I feel like I am missing something with the way it ended. As a bit of constructive criticism, you should work on that. There are ways to write cliffy endings that never get resolved without it seeming like you just stopped writing whereever you felt like it. I hope that makes sense.
person DvlshYFnGrl
schedule October 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah
what happened to the smut?!?!?!?
that was a mean cliff-hanger =~='
person jane
schedule August 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*Clicks little down arrow*
*Does not see a chapter 2*
*is confused*

Why is the smut gone? Why no more?
person jaz
schedule August 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
theres more to this right...right? i hate cliffhanggers!!


person rosiel
schedule August 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
two blondes, so hot *drools*
person Saka
schedule July 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ohh you have to update! Leaving it there is just mean. ^_^ Great job so far.
person Anon
schedule July 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
there's going to be more....right?
person kunitsu
schedule July 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OH wow, this is really nice. I'm looking forward to the smut, update soon