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September 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OMG! I have been reading this after I read the prequel and the other current ongoing one: The Rules of life.
I want to see where Snape and Harry take themselves.
I also love the sub/Dom roles you have created- I want to know more about that type of relationship - also more on BDSM stuff too ^___^
Keep up the goodwork - I am rooting for you!
I want to see where Snape and Harry take themselves.
I also love the sub/Dom roles you have created- I want to know more about that type of relationship - also more on BDSM stuff too ^___^
Keep up the goodwork - I am rooting for you!
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July 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I've just finished reading Both parts to your stories. I'm rather pleased with how you've portrayed a Master/slave relationship like theirs. I'm a submissive, and had been looking for some good Snape/harry fics. I really enjoyed this. Any plans on finishing it? Do you think you'll use more aspects of BDSM into their relationship? Great story.
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May 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Amazing I just loved that you made a sequal I was like Yeah!! oh and I like the poems
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April 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
A bit of cc here, try to keep the a/n's to a min, or at least in one spot. the poems ar nice, but you want to have more story than filler. It is a very good start, and I am looking forward to reading more chapters, but remember it isn't about how many words you have on the page, but the story that you are trying to bring to life....
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April 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
First...i hope your father is ok.
Second, i want to say that i read and enjoyed your previous story (prequel to this). I don't do much reading these days, but can't resist new D/s stories....
I'm glad you decided to continue this series....clearly your ending of the prequel was intentionally unresolved so that you could continue.
I hope my comments serve more to kindle ideas, etc, rather than offend. Apologies if they do....
I confess I am a bit confused about your narrative direction. The plot seems a bit muddled at the moment, perhaps that will change, but I find myself very confused about what you're doing with harry (and not in a 'i don't know what's going on' sort of way). I think the problem is that this story seems completely separate/dissociated from your prequel. It's almost like you have abandoned what you started there...although you may get back to it (please!).
Your focus on harry's illness has served to 'de-sexualize' Harry completely. You have in essence made him seem 12 years old again, completely weak and dependent on Severus. What this does, is make sexual advancement of their relationship very difficult for you. In fact at this point, it would seem perverted.
Now...perhaps this is your intention. You ended your prequel with a significant forward momentum in the sexual arena between HP and SS. I'm sensing that you want the reader to 'take a breath' and pause as you develop another solid story that will serve as a catalyst in the development of Severus's/Harry's relationship (?)
What I am hoping you do eventually get to is a point where Harry is healthy "physically" so that you can explore his still fragile "mental" health - specifically as it pertains to the growing D/s relationship between HP and SS. I envision HP having difficulties with the conflict of being a submissive while his independence is just now flourishing for the first time in his life. I envision HP having difficulties as SS pushes his limits as the dominant, which of course he will do. I envision Severus having to carefully judge Harry's limits and adjust, etc. I am hoping this is the part of the story you get back to.
I am, however, a big proponent of author's free will - in fact, i don't think being overly swayed by reviews is a good thing. Sometimes they do help an author, but often (as i have found) they can sidetrack an author's vision/strategy. So what's my point? I think you should take my comments with a grain of salt. If they resonate with you, great. If not, please take no offense and continue with your plan.
Either way, I am very much looking forward to your next chapters!
Second, i want to say that i read and enjoyed your previous story (prequel to this). I don't do much reading these days, but can't resist new D/s stories....
I'm glad you decided to continue this series....clearly your ending of the prequel was intentionally unresolved so that you could continue.
I hope my comments serve more to kindle ideas, etc, rather than offend. Apologies if they do....
I confess I am a bit confused about your narrative direction. The plot seems a bit muddled at the moment, perhaps that will change, but I find myself very confused about what you're doing with harry (and not in a 'i don't know what's going on' sort of way). I think the problem is that this story seems completely separate/dissociated from your prequel. It's almost like you have abandoned what you started there...although you may get back to it (please!).
Your focus on harry's illness has served to 'de-sexualize' Harry completely. You have in essence made him seem 12 years old again, completely weak and dependent on Severus. What this does, is make sexual advancement of their relationship very difficult for you. In fact at this point, it would seem perverted.
Now...perhaps this is your intention. You ended your prequel with a significant forward momentum in the sexual arena between HP and SS. I'm sensing that you want the reader to 'take a breath' and pause as you develop another solid story that will serve as a catalyst in the development of Severus's/Harry's relationship (?)
What I am hoping you do eventually get to is a point where Harry is healthy "physically" so that you can explore his still fragile "mental" health - specifically as it pertains to the growing D/s relationship between HP and SS. I envision HP having difficulties with the conflict of being a submissive while his independence is just now flourishing for the first time in his life. I envision HP having difficulties as SS pushes his limits as the dominant, which of course he will do. I envision Severus having to carefully judge Harry's limits and adjust, etc. I am hoping this is the part of the story you get back to.
I am, however, a big proponent of author's free will - in fact, i don't think being overly swayed by reviews is a good thing. Sometimes they do help an author, but often (as i have found) they can sidetrack an author's vision/strategy. So what's my point? I think you should take my comments with a grain of salt. If they resonate with you, great. If not, please take no offense and continue with your plan.
Either way, I am very much looking forward to your next chapters!
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April 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I think the second part is as good as the first I can't wait to read the reast. Update soon. As to what the sickness should be I think it should be a little sickness and a little moldiepants.
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April 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
1,3or 4
keep going and post soon
bye bye
keep going and post soon
bye bye
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April 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
very very good chapter keep going and post soon
bye bye
bye bye
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April 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
YAY! No MS is good! You could maybe explain the memory loss by him inhaling a nasty potion without anyone knowing and that's why. Harry could be tired because his body is starting to have a big growing spurt. That's all that I could think of for you!
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April 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ooo # 2 :D i'm sick of voldy ruining harry's life... although getting MS might do it too.. at least it's not voldy.. but if it means that harry will die then i'd go with vold -_-;; so long as harry still gets to live happily ever after by the end of the fic i'm good :D he needs the rest and stuff, and has suffered enough as it is!! great story!! i love it! please please update soon