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The inconsistent capitalization of letters at the beginning of a sentence vied with the run-on sentences themselves. I suggest a beta editor.

more than intruging. you have a good writing style and the opening chapter looks promising. please update soon. kisses!

hmm... i have read a few of these stories and i happen to like them so it will be interesting to see where you are going with this... Keep updating soon and you guarantee my interest! ;)
Good start,
Stef

Great start so far! Can't wait for more.

Hi!
So...wow. This could be really, really good! Can't wait for the next chapter, so please update soon! And I love the way Harry's all aloof and such! *yay*
Keep up the good work!
//LoveGD

nice, hope u continue!

Nice. I think this could be a great fic. I hope that you plan to update soon. If you do, is there a way that I can be notified?

I love Harry/Draco fics. They're my OTP :)

Thanks, *Star*

Well, interesting start, but I wondering whether it Harry/Draco or Draco/Harry. I usually place dominant partner name first into the pairing, and there wasn't any pairing announced in your story for now. Also, I slightly bothered by phrase "... convince the stubborn Gryffindor that he was meant to belong to Draco". It's Harry, being *belonging* to someone, that bothers me so. There is already a fact, that "Harry is wed to Draco", somehow forced to do that for wizarding world, already has sacrificed the rest of his life and his freedom for peace, to belong to someone is sound as sort of slavery, and it doesn't look right to me. Besides, I had already saw some stories where Harry was married or bonded to Draco " for big good", and there is a plenty of those where Harry becomes sort of domestic little wife, about what I can just say "EWWW!" :)
I tell you, Harry just too strong-willed and independent person to took well the thought about belonging to someone.
And I positively adore your Harry as he is now: strong, confident, powerful, capable to be cold to whom he doesn't like and at the same time capable to be "so bloody polite and charming" if he want to be. He is wonderful, right now, please, don't change him. :)
What get me angry, though, is that Bellatrix and Dolohov is free. I understand why Lucius is freed from Azkaban, if he was there during the war, he didn't so much damage and caused so much death, but Bella? She is crazy! I don't see, how she can be free, even if there is a truce between Dark and Light sides. Someone should protect society from her. I don't say kill her, but she and alike just must be imprisoned.

Interesting, interesting. I wonder what comes next?

Great first chapter...I'm looking forward to your next one.