rate_review Reviews

That was so sexy, omg. that is so totally cream your knickers worthy....*proceeds to wake my husband so i can get a ride.*

I'd personally be interested in reading more, but only if you have enough plot to continue past these few chapters.

O_O. I think you should continue it. Like, make it complicated, maybe someone finding out that wasn't supposed to. But it's your story so do with what you want. Thanks for writing it. I never really vared for Harry/Snape But i really like this. ~Ja ne~

more please....whats there life going to be like now i wonder?

I really like this story.. definetly one of my favorites.. Good job!
*Waits for the rest*

Wow... This story was great. I love the way you built up to the sex. The tension just kept getting thicker. In my opinion that's the best part. As usual I have a few suggestions though. If you're going to write from different points of view you should keep them together. Like the first half of the chapter be Harry's point of view of that day, then the second half be Snape's. If you write out the whole story in one point of view then rewrite it in another, it basically becomes a repeat. The reader already know what happens. If the goal is to keep a reader's attention, that's not a good way to do it. And in my opinion having those "could be heaven" titles at different parts of the story was distracting. I guess that is a personal preference. I also think you jumped around to flasbacks a little much. You sort of wrote like it was still present tense. It was a little confusing at times.

Oh my god! oh my god! I love this! Amazing! Wonderful! *wide smile*

The way you devided the chapters with "~The Pit of Hell" and the like I thought was great. Also the way you described Harry's emotions was very good. You had me crying there.

I dont know if you should post the other chapters or not. This was a very good, witty, fluffy, funny ending all on its own. It all depends on what you are thinking on writing next and how that effects the story... I very much want to know what happens though. So if you dont post the chapters in this story, perhaps you could make them into a sequel? Whatever you decide to do; please mail me when you do!

Please continue! This was an awsome story! Have you thought of doing M-preg?

I'd say go on with it. After all Draco Malfoy still has to figure it out.

Good story update soon (if theres more)