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February 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You're so cruel! This chapter was blatand and realy realy horrible but at least as good! I'm anxious to read the following chapters!
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February 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is a really good fanfic, I love how the story unfolds
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February 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh poor Harry! So worried about Sev. I can't wait to see how they interact next.
cdk
cdk
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February 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh it was very good love... I can't get enough of your writing is is very well written! Get a job soon love ^^
Keep the chapter coming ^^
Keep the chapter coming ^^
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February 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ack!! i hope they get back together...with lots of make-up angsty sex hahahaha
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February 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
*sobs* it ended way tooo soon. Please update soon. I beg you. Why would snape end it? What is he hiding? Update soon!
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January 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh dear, a small taste of whats to come? Sounds like bad news... but interesting all the same.
I think you've written Snapes character perfectly, and the conversation was exactly how I would expect Snape to try and end things with Harry. Shame he can't see how much sex appeal he actually holds (Snape I mean). I also think that the conversation shows that Snapes basically a good guy. Cos it means that he actually has morals and feels guilt, that being said if he didn't have any morals he would have obviously allowed things to go futher than he did. Thats why its good that he didn't. It shows that in his heart he isn't actually a death eater.
Poor Harry though, I like his plan, delicious possibilities. Does that mean he'll become the biggest flirt and stir up Snapes jelousy, or, will something happen and this Ravenclaw isn't as nice as he appears whereupon Snapes protective instincts flood him and he ~cough~ takes care of the problem?
I'm not sure how good a beta I'd be.
I wasn't really looking for mistakes when I read your fanfic, I never do, takes the enjoyment out of the fic.
Can't say I noticed anything wrong... but I offer you my beta services when you need them if you'd like.
Couldn't see anything that didn't sound British (i.e. Americanisms like Candy instead of sweets) that being said are you British? Cus I am and if you ever have a problem with anything remotally regional, you just shout at me and I'll help you. I can't stand it when people say their writing follows cannot and then you read it and find that it actually isn't, and they haven't even bothered trying to find the British equivilant to whatever word they use. Puts me right off a fic that does. Anyway, sorry, rant's over now.
Excellent fic, very erotic in places. Couldn't stop reading until the end! Well, not the end but you know what I mean!
Can't wait for more,
patiently waiting,
erin03
PS thank you for reviewing my fic, it was lovely that you gave my fic a chance, even though you don't usually like non-con. :-) and I hope this review was detailed enough, I noticed the detailed was in caps, lol. So from now on I'll try to be more observant!
I think you've written Snapes character perfectly, and the conversation was exactly how I would expect Snape to try and end things with Harry. Shame he can't see how much sex appeal he actually holds (Snape I mean). I also think that the conversation shows that Snapes basically a good guy. Cos it means that he actually has morals and feels guilt, that being said if he didn't have any morals he would have obviously allowed things to go futher than he did. Thats why its good that he didn't. It shows that in his heart he isn't actually a death eater.
Poor Harry though, I like his plan, delicious possibilities. Does that mean he'll become the biggest flirt and stir up Snapes jelousy, or, will something happen and this Ravenclaw isn't as nice as he appears whereupon Snapes protective instincts flood him and he ~cough~ takes care of the problem?
I'm not sure how good a beta I'd be.
I wasn't really looking for mistakes when I read your fanfic, I never do, takes the enjoyment out of the fic.
Can't say I noticed anything wrong... but I offer you my beta services when you need them if you'd like.
Couldn't see anything that didn't sound British (i.e. Americanisms like Candy instead of sweets) that being said are you British? Cus I am and if you ever have a problem with anything remotally regional, you just shout at me and I'll help you. I can't stand it when people say their writing follows cannot and then you read it and find that it actually isn't, and they haven't even bothered trying to find the British equivilant to whatever word they use. Puts me right off a fic that does. Anyway, sorry, rant's over now.
Excellent fic, very erotic in places. Couldn't stop reading until the end! Well, not the end but you know what I mean!
Can't wait for more,
patiently waiting,
erin03
PS thank you for reviewing my fic, it was lovely that you gave my fic a chance, even though you don't usually like non-con. :-) and I hope this review was detailed enough, I noticed the detailed was in caps, lol. So from now on I'll try to be more observant!
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January 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is a great story. I look foward to reading more.
Ari
Ari
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January 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Very amusing! I love Hp/SS and MM's reaction to Harry being with 3 girls that week was so predictable!
Anywho, on to the next chappie!
Anywho, on to the next chappie!
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January 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh ick! Am lmao though, imagine having to talk with your headmaster about such things! When I was at school my headmaster would probably have had a seizure over it and gone into cardiac arrest if he'd been in DD place. Hahahaha DD definatly handled that well.
I'm glad DD gave him a book instead of having a chat though... oh the possibilities! I might have to do that actually, my muse is kicking me.
I'm glad DD gave him a book instead of having a chat though... oh the possibilities! I might have to do that actually, my muse is kicking me.