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Hey! You! Author!! Three years is a LONG time to be dormant. This was a really really awesome start. I like your style and three years should only have improved it, and you didn't write out an introduction like this without grand ideas for the future of the story so PLEASE PLEASE get back to the keys and get on with it! This is fresh and original and has loads of potential! Pull it out of the dusty corners of your imagination and create again! If nothing else, start a new story, I absolutely love writers who explore the HP universe BEYOND the characters we know so much about! No more Trio tales or Marauders--we want to know what and who else is out there! You only posted one chapter of one story and that's a shame because this is really, really good fan work, I don't know why you didn't get more ***** ratings! I'm probably begging for nothing but if aught else, know that this was a very special effort and I think your prose is lovely. If you ever get back into posting again, I'd be more than happy to beta for you. Good luck!!

Ellie

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Hey there!

I just got your review for Keys and thought I would return the favor and pop over and read your story.

So, you\'re writing a Draco/OC as well, eh? So far it looks interesting. I look forward to the interaction between Kat and Draco.

I have one small suggestion to make regarding the format of your story. It is proper form for character dialog to seperate each character\'s lines into a seperate paragraph. I noticed that you had all your dialog running together. I think if you seperated them out that would make it easier on the eyes to read. It is for me, anyway. I like the lines to be broken up. It\'s easier on the eye and doesn\'t overwhelm you with a huge paragraph.

Just a little suggestion, form wise. Plot wise, so far, looks fun!

I\'ll be watching out for the next chapter!

Cheers!

Lorett

not to bad