rate_review Reviews

wow, i really love this story. usually when people try to write the abusive boyfriend and saviour snape it gets to be really overdone or weird, but you\'ve done a REALLY fabulous job, and at the end of this last chapter i was waving my hands around like \"NO HERMIONE DON\'T DO IT!\" i usually don\'t get so involved in stories! please keep updating, it\'s fabulous!

Ch 9 - can you kill Evil!Remus? and Arrogant!Malfoy? Off with their heads! Thanks for the new chapter.

Like the story, keep going!! ;D Snape is my favorite, but I love when people make Remus kinda sexy, too. Nicely done!

i love this story i cant what in till you update next ...sooooooooooooooo please update soon thank you and later

angel

A beta proofreads your stuff before you post it, to check for errors and such. I would be happy to volunteer to beta. Just send the stuff to my email address (jmarieclark@gmail.com) and I\'ll send it back.
JMarie

This story is going wonderfully. A beta proof reads, checks grammar, facts, and any loose ends that are possibly there. If you need one I\'d be happy to lend out my services. Thank you.

Hey, I like your story so far. But you do need a beta. (but I see that\'s been mentioned before)
A beta is someone who reads the chapter before you post it here and checks it for spelling/grammar-errors and things like that ;-)

much easier to read now that it is double spaced. I had the same problem myself the first time I posted. I\'m adding this to my stories to check daily for updates. Keep up the good work.

You have a very good story going here. I am quite enjoying it. If I may make a suggestion, I think that you should find a beta. There were not a lot of mistakes, but there were a couple of canon misspellings, a couple of areas where the wording is not completely clear, and the spacing between the paragraphs. Otherwise, this is one of the better fics that I have read. There is a plot here that is clear and concise, and I commend you! There are some really great betas out there, and AFF has the group that you can utilize. Just look at the top in the AFF disclaimer. I am not taking any more authors for betareading myself or I would volunteer. I have a lot of stuff going on and feel bad for the other authors whose stories I have not beta\'ed in a while. *grins sheepishly* Wonderful story, and please update soon. I also left my email address if you need to talk or need someone to bounce ideas off.

I like what you have so far, but might I make a suggestion? It is very hard to read a story on the computer screen when it is not spaced. I know we read books this way but its very hard on the eyes to do so on a computer. Place a space between the paragraphs, and with each start of a new conversation. It will make it easier to follow.

Also, is this a love triangle? Meaning Snape/Hermione/Malfoy? If so then I\'m looking forward to reading more.