schedule
September 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love your story and by the way, jeremiah's last name is hart
schedule
March 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nice fic! Looking forward to seeing how it goes.
A few things:
Your writing isn\'t the best, though it does a good job. Try working on your punctuation - your wording\'s pretty good.
Some of it goes by a bit fast. If you want to explain something to the reader, you could do it through dialogue instead of info-dumping it.
Prophetic - do you mean pathetic?
And if you\'re having trouble trying to explain anything, especially through dialogue, read it out to yourself. See how it would be different if you were just saying it instead of writing it.
Want more of the story! Update soon!
A few things:
Your writing isn\'t the best, though it does a good job. Try working on your punctuation - your wording\'s pretty good.
Some of it goes by a bit fast. If you want to explain something to the reader, you could do it through dialogue instead of info-dumping it.
Prophetic - do you mean pathetic?
And if you\'re having trouble trying to explain anything, especially through dialogue, read it out to yourself. See how it would be different if you were just saying it instead of writing it.
Want more of the story! Update soon!