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How could you write a story like this twist it up so and leave it forso long without updating Have you written anything else?

Noo... Evil you!!
Anyway, do update soon will ya... :) Poor Harry... First Sirius' death, now Draco...
Update soon

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K

Poor harry, awesome plot, and well written please update soon.

Okay, first off....niiiice....I like your writing style. The only thing I have to say you might wanna look up on is....*drum roll*....why is Draco the bad guy? AGAIN? He\'s always the bad guy....or was it someone who was pretending to be Draco? Like they drank some polyjuice potion and whatnot....hmmmm....I must contemplate this....

Ron needs to be told! Please do it next chapter...great with the angst.

It\'s too rushed. The story doesn\'t feel realistic to how they would act towards each other at first. You have Harry running to Snape within the first day of actually being with him... it\'s hard to imagine that years of hate would suddenly turn to trust, even if they were subconsciously burying feelings for each other. Those things take time. Also, their animosity at first doesn\'t seem very real to me, they are hostile to each other but they don\'t trade cheap insults, it\'s hard to describe but the scenes need to be slower, more processed, more emotions, more conflict.

Overall though, I like the concept and I like your ideas. I like how Harry finds Ron and Draco together and it makes him run off. I also like Meddling Dumbledore. Keep writing. That\'s the only way to improve.

^^ This is good. XD Ah,poor Sev,he was unattended to. XD Maybe next chapie,ne? ^^