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May 6, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Ever try \'Claritin\'? My allergy problem was almost gone with it^_^(Before, I had runny nose, watery eyes and sneeze a thousand time just barely set foot oft of my house!) A cheap price to pay for getting rid of those damn ALLERGY!
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May 6, 2003 at 12:00 AM
You are a god of fanfiction. I was so pissed when they toou oou off ff.net, glad I found this site.
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May 6, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Very happy to see a new chapter. The interaction between Lucius and Voldemort was fascinating, esp. Voldemort\'s grudging respect even though Luci has tried to kill him several times and I loved his obesession with Luci\'s demon hair. Plus after reading so many stories where Lucius is the ultimate unemotional Ice King, it\'s delightful to see him completely lose his temper. I mean, Draco had to get it from somewhere, right? ;) I just love the little details you put into the characters that give them such a rich history to draw from. I\'m so sorry to hear about your computer crash. A storm recently took out my modem, I was so very grateful it didn\'t take out anything else, since I\'m the worst about backing things up.
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May 6, 2003 at 12:00 AM
More chapters! We\'re craving more! One is never enough. Please...don\'t abandon this fic. It\'s far too magnificent for that.
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May 6, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Wow... I read all 18 chapters in one go last night. I\'m so so pleased that I found this story. I feel like I\'ve read almost every Harry/Draco fic out there (well maybe not all, but hundreds anyway), and there are quite a few. There are a few notable ones, but oh, this one just floored me. The first chapter... omg.. I\'m in love*lust*love with your Draco. He\'s one of the closest to in character (well how I think he would be by that age at any rate) that I\'ve seen in a fic thus far. Please, please, I beg you to continue with this story. It\'s so good, dear. I\'ll be checking back every so often to see!
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May 5, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I tried reading this story and while it had an interesting premise, there were four things that kept me from being able to complete it.
1. Over dependence on euphemisms. Harry\'s raven-haired. Snape\'s raven-haired. Zabini\'s raven-haired, Draco\'s cyrstal gray eyes. Ugh. While it might get tiresome to type \"Harry/Snape/Draco\" etc over and over again, it\'s less confusing, and more believable.
2. Logic gaps/continuity issues. In chapter five you mention how Draco has inhereted Lucius\' love of revenge. Chapter one was spent going over Draco\'s revenge on the Gryffindors. Basically, you pointed something out that we already knew. I also think that Draco\'s power revenge wise is just a little excessive, but I won\'t dwell on that here. WIPs are nice because they offer the writer encouragment as they go, the problem is things like this crop up. I\'d suggest going back and revising to try and fix tings a little.
3. Pro-Slytherin fic are fine; bashing the Gryffindor to all hell because of it isn\'t. It actually is possible to write a fic that puts the Slytherins in a good light without degrading the Gryffindors. It makes for a more believable and enjoyable fic.
4. Harry\'s characterization is just....yikes. There are things there that need to be fixed. Really gh, gh, this goes in hand with the Gryffindor bashing. Ease up on one and the other possible would correct itself.
For a first time fic, it really shows a lot of potential and I hope you keep writing. I think a good beta would go a long ways in helping you to polish up your fic to something more enjoyable ^_^
1. Over dependence on euphemisms. Harry\'s raven-haired. Snape\'s raven-haired. Zabini\'s raven-haired, Draco\'s cyrstal gray eyes. Ugh. While it might get tiresome to type \"Harry/Snape/Draco\" etc over and over again, it\'s less confusing, and more believable.
2. Logic gaps/continuity issues. In chapter five you mention how Draco has inhereted Lucius\' love of revenge. Chapter one was spent going over Draco\'s revenge on the Gryffindors. Basically, you pointed something out that we already knew. I also think that Draco\'s power revenge wise is just a little excessive, but I won\'t dwell on that here. WIPs are nice because they offer the writer encouragment as they go, the problem is things like this crop up. I\'d suggest going back and revising to try and fix tings a little.
3. Pro-Slytherin fic are fine; bashing the Gryffindor to all hell because of it isn\'t. It actually is possible to write a fic that puts the Slytherins in a good light without degrading the Gryffindors. It makes for a more believable and enjoyable fic.
4. Harry\'s characterization is just....yikes. There are things there that need to be fixed. Really gh, gh, this goes in hand with the Gryffindor bashing. Ease up on one and the other possible would correct itself.
For a first time fic, it really shows a lot of potential and I hope you keep writing. I think a good beta would go a long ways in helping you to polish up your fic to something more enjoyable ^_^
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May 5, 2003 at 12:00 AM
finally you\'ve updated!!! yeah!...woo hooo! leaps in joy.
hu hu, so there seems to be a GW fan lurking in the background...^.^ love the reference!
I like the way lucius\' persona is being depicted, he is much more dynamic than in most fic've 've read.
please update sooooooon!!!!!
ps: you have my sympathy for your computer, even with disks starting over setting everything up again is so painful...
hu hu, so there seems to be a GW fan lurking in the background...^.^ love the reference!
I like the way lucius\' persona is being depicted, he is much more dynamic than in most fic've 've read.
please update sooooooon!!!!!
ps: you have my sympathy for your computer, even with disks starting over setting everything up again is so painful...
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May 5, 2003 at 12:00 AM
*pat, pat* poor girl......nice chapy....do continue, ne?
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April 30, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Hey, I\'ve been desperately wanting to read that. Why did they take this off ff.net? Anyway, update this soon, PLLLLEEEEAAAAASSSSSSSEEEEEEEE, you will always have my undieing love.
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April 29, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Wow,
This is a really great story ad I cannot wait to see what happenes next. I just started readinrry rry Potter after watching both movies and reading year one - three. I just recieved year four and I just want to say you really bring these characters to life. Keep up the good work.
This is a really great story ad I cannot wait to see what happenes next. I just started readinrry rry Potter after watching both movies and reading year one - three. I just recieved year four and I just want to say you really bring these characters to life. Keep up the good work.