rate_review Reviews

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

I think it would be a stronger story without Chapter 4. Since Chapter 5 happens RE CRE Chapter 4, it makes Chapter 4 confusing as hell. Or did you just accidentally post them out of order? If you just reworked Chapter 4 a bit, and then reworked Chapter 5 a bit, so that the reader can stay clear on the time frame...then it would be fine. Otherwise, people read Chapter 4 and they have to scratch their heads and wonder what the heck is going on.

You're off to a good start so far, and it's very interesting to use the movie "Desperately Seeking Susan."

Okay well at least now I get the informality. Thanks for the update. I think I know who the mystery couple is, but then again maybe I think its obvious but it isn't.

The story is going nicely, but in this last chapter you had Hermione calling Dumbledore, Dumbledore and Albus. Yes this is fiction but there is no way she or anyone would ever call him that without respectively adding ei Hea Headmaster or Professor to his name. She has enough respect to use Professor with Snape but not Dumbledore? Friendly terms or not, he is much older than her and before inducted into the Order respected in her eyes, so why the informality?

i love this story already... cannot wait for next chapter... ::sits on edge of seat, biting nails and rocking profusely::