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Wow this is a very creative story and a rather good cliff hanger. I had problems figuring out who was talking and what was going on when Hermione was getting Snape. I can't wait for the next chapter, that was a cruel place to leave it.

-Myth

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

I\'m really enjoying this story, even though I normally only read slash.
The concept of the Hollow Man is fascinating...
I can\'t wait to find out where Snape\'s soul is and whether they can get it back (please...)
Update soon.

awesome job. I can\'t wait until they find snapes soul. I like how you protray Hermione that my favorite part, she has the kind of spirit I\'d want her to have and that is just fantastic. Thanks you for writing this story.
Damsel@

Excellent job! I love your story... please update!

I came across your story reading another persons story in the Hollow Man challenge. It was interesting and wonderful to see where everyone went with the basic premise.
I truly enjoyed all these stories as well written.
I think you have given wonderful life to the characters even Severus. It is easy to see and feel Hermione\'s emotions at puring ing Severus. Her well known dislike of forced servitude with the House Elves must have caused her great pain knowing her former professor was on the block. While she may not have liked him, she certainly respected and admired him.
Your use of Harry and Draco was well thought through. I feel for Harry and Draco seeing someone so wrongly punished. Interesting you had Harry taking care of Severus\' arm with great care. It is easy to feel Hermione\'s embarassment knowing she has to care for Severus like a child. She must have so many conflicting thoughts running through her head.
I wonder, will Albus reappear and will Draco be caught up in the maddness too.
Will you let me know when the next chapter is up?
Great work!

Hi, I just found your story today and it\'s awesome. I can\'t wait to read more :)
One comment only: Your use of commas to connect several sentences together
is a bit distracting. For example, you have \"Before he had been gaunt, stretched
as though to breaking point, but at least he had still been Snape, now he is a
fragile thing, emaciated and bruised, with yet another brand of ownership
adorning his person.\" It would read better, in my opinion, if you had a period after
\"Snape\". You probably need a comma after \"Before\", as well.
Anyway, other than that it\'s a great story. I like the pacing and the fact that past
events are being explained by the characters in a natural way, rather than by the
narrator.

Chapter 2 - I\'m sorry that I missed that you\'d updated this fic, but I\'m pleased that I have more than one chapter to read now. ;) You\'re bringing the story along nicely. I particularly enjoyed the comment regarding the junk and gym gear in Hermione\'s basement, it was a particularly nice touch that added to the setting wonderfully.

Hermione\'s confusion over just what to do with Snape was very realistically done. Too many authors would have had her be more certain of herself and your approach seems much more reasonable.

Now, off to read the next chapter.

Chapter 3 - The sentient book is a very clever plot device, and one I\'ve never seen used before; I\'m impressed. ;) Hermione\'s injury was also well done. Too many fics seem to keep the trio of Harry, Ron and Hermione mysteriously intact all the way through. War causes injuries and you\'ve addressed that issue very frankly.

Now, off to read the next chapter.

Chapter 4 - Again, nicely done. I particularly enjoyed the scene in Hermione\'s laboratory where she ends up self-consciously chattering to Snape. It was a realistic reaction and I could see that happening very easily. I\'m now wondering about Ron and his reasons for avoiding Harry and Here, we, where Dumbledore ended up and, of course, if Snape\'s soul will end up back in his body. ;)

I\'m looking forward to your next update.