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for A Father\'s Revenge

by JennaSlytherin

person Kiristeen
schedule January 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Excellent setup. : ) Can\'t wait to read more.


Kiri
person Beth
schedule January 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I hate to crize, ze, but... it\'s ZABINI, not Zambini. Not zamboni, either. The Zambini Bros run a restaurant chain. A zamboni is an ice-resurfacing machine.

It\'s a promising plot, although Draco\'s character is far too American-middle-class for my taste.
person Draco_Fan
schedule January 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
OMG! Yes!!! Hehe... Update soon! I love it!!! I LOVE D/HR!!!!!!
person Zephyr
schedule January 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Great third chapter !!! I canwaitwait for morE!!!!
person genrou
schedule January 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
ooooo..i reallke hke how things are preogressithouthough i wish the chapters were longer. please write more soon. thanks.
person Serpent du feu
schedule January 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Pretty good start and the plot is very unique too!
Write more.
person deblovesdragon
schedule January 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
It is a good start. Interesting story idea.
Perhaps you can make the chapters a little longer. More detail maybe. More of the baby girl.
I look forward to your next chapters.
Cheers.
person Zephyr
schedule January 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
The is a great Chapter 2. I can\'t wait for hermione\'s response! More.. Longer Chapters!!!!
person genrou
schedule January 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
whoa! that was a total shocking revealation. i sure as hell didnt see that one coming. im definately ntrigued and hope to see more soon. thanks.
person Adriannna
schedule January 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh, the plot thickens. can\'t wait for more!!