rate_review Reviews

Well, I like the story. That\'s why fanfiction was invented, people! If I wanted to write a story where Snapes sings show toons I could because it\'s an author\'s creativity. Loosen up people. If writers can put Harry and Draco together or Snape and Hermione, then this story is the least of my worries. =)

Hey, I\'ve only read the first chapter but I think it has potential. Just pace yourself, you\'ve got a lot going on in a short amount of time. Also your grammar and spelling could be better. Do you have a beta? If not, I\'m willing to help if you want, just email me. It takes courage to put yourself out there and some people choose to look past that and leave rude and hateful reviews.

Oh. My. God. I\'m speechless with rage. It has obviously been my extreme privilege to have thus far spent my time around people who do not possess either a propensity or a blatant desire to thuroughly *butcher* the english language. This is by far the WORST piece of writing I\'ve ever seen, in terms of spelling, grammar, and plot development. You need to subtly introduce plot points, not blare them from the top of the tallest tower. Good Lord, I don\'t think this flame can even begin to do justice to your maiming of arts that I and many other authors on this site hold dear. Namely: Grammar, spelling, plot development, cliffhangers, and the subtle science and exact art that is REMAINING SOMEWHAT TRUE TO CHARACTER! Where is Simon when you need him? Have you even heard of a beta? How old are you? I\'ve met eight-year-olds who could write better than this.

Here at aff.net, we are on the honor system to not go skimming through fanfictions when we are *far* too young to be reading even the most mild smut posted here. We are also on the honor system to *not* pepper our fellow authors with inanely bad fanfiction. Go back to Neopets.

-jo

Hello, just wanted to apologize. I made a mistake. It\'s \'thoroughly,\' not \'thuroughly.\' My bad.

-jo

aww that was so sweet and yummy all in one! it was worth the wait! ^_^

Please finish that. that was so realistic i could almost feel them.