Christmas Wish
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Harry Potter › Slash - Male/Male › Harry/Draco
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Adult +
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2,591
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Category:
Harry Potter › Slash - Male/Male › Harry/Draco
Rating:
Adult +
Chapters:
2
Views:
2,591
Reviews:
6
Recommended:
0
Currently Reading:
0
Disclaimer:
I do not own Harry Potter, nor any of the characters from the books or movies. I do not make any money from the writing of this story.
Review response
Lena’s response to a reviewer.
Thank you so much. But I got this REALLY long review and I had to answer it. There are bits and pieces of what I’m answering.
YuYuHakushoLover
-Don\'t use ^text^ as actions. Don\'t even PUT actions in the quotations. Write like: \"I,\" kiss, \"love,\" kiss, \"you,\" kiss, \"Draco Malfoy.\" It is just easier to read.
-Don\'t smush things together. You go from Harry and Draco somewhat angry with each other to suddenly, Draco is all lovey-dovey.
-They aren\'t in character. Harry just isn\'t Harry. He doesn\'t react the way he should. And Draco is... like... meh. He\'s just not Draco. I see Draco, if he\'s trying to love Harry, getting confused and not knowing whether to follow his father or to love Harry. You go right from somewhat hating to \'I love you! Look at the GREAT room I made for us to fuck in! Shweeee!\' more or less. It\'s like oO\" Remember the facts about the characters = Draco equal cold bastard who if he ever loves someone he shouldn\'t (meaning not Pansy, etc.), then he fights with himself because he doesn\'t know whether to stay a Malfoy or to love whoever he wants like \'common folk.\' And Harry = tempermental teenager who is having soooo many troubles in his life.
-You go from Harry not knowing what a Christmas Wishing Star is to knowing how he was going to use it in like three lines. That\'s... not normal.
-If only ONE Christmas Wishing Star falls every THREE years, do you know how much it\'d cost? Like 1,000,000 galleons! And Lucius would grab it to make him supreme ruler, or Voldemort would steal one to make him supreme ruler with Harry dead... or something.
-It\'s Lily, not Lilly. And... she wouldn\'t be a ghost. If she were, then she would have seen Harry a LONG time ago. It\'d be something more like Ginny or Luna.
-Ron should be more than just confused. He should be mad or what not...
-Thoughts should be \'text\' or something similar, not in {} or it\'s confusing as it looks like messed up Author Notes.
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OK lemme say first off. I didn’t even bother to read over this fic before I posted it. My friend had it on her computer, sent it to me, and suggested I post it. So I did, and I only skimmed it. I know shame on me as a writer. BAD LENA! So all grammar and punctuation mistakes were a result of my skimming.
Anyway. The carrots were used because I uploaded once and then the whole file was in italics then I did the “quotes” and that messed up. SO I went back and fixed that and then the actions were gone. So I used the only think I of… the carrot thingies.
I didn’t want to make this a five part story where harry and draco analyse there feelings and then realise they want each other. I just wanted a cute fluffy story. So yea it did move face but only because of the fact it needed to. Who knows maybe there maybe a backlash from this and that might spark a sequal who knows.
This story happened BEFORE order of the phoenix, once agian this was written a while ago. So the only death that happened was cedric. And, unlike my other stories, the Dursleys weren’t as bad to harry as they could have been. So harry was a semi normal 17 year old who fell head over heels with someone they hate (don’t say it can’t be done! I’ve seen it happen.) Second. I was showing a different side of Draco. One that believes in the possibilities of fast love and fuck the consequences. Sure it\'s not good, but it\'s fiction!
Haven’t you gotten money and decided automatically you’re gonna try and get the one thing you want? Well if not I have, and I’d image Harry’d do the same. He’s impulsive, we all know that. And besides, normal is relative. What’s normal to you isn’t normal to me.
Ok, I admit I messed up that part. But just assume that Lucius has tried to attain one and failed. OR that they can be only used for good not evil. Or just assume he didn’t know about it. USE YOUR IMAGINATION!
The ghost thing was my doing. I just thought it would be sweet and everyone else didn’t have a problem with it. What if Lily was forbade to see Harry in ghost form, ever think of that? Suspend reality for three seconds and lighten up!
I don’t like Ron. I feel he’s more of a Crabbe and Goyle type when it comes to love (did you not read Goblet of Fire…. HELLO!). So of course he wouldn’t understand.
And finally the thoughts thing I’ve been doing for years and that’s the way I do it. Partly because most of my sites don’t do italics, another part because it’s how I write.
FINALLY I’d like to say that I know harry potter inside and out. I did a freaking paper on it in college. I know what I’m talking about. I have my opinions of harry and draco and so do you. Please don’t try and change my opinions and I won’t try and change yours.
ALSO! This is a FICLET! Not a big story, so of course it will move fast. Don’t like it, don’t read it.
I feel better now.
I wasn’t being a bitch, I just felt I had to say that.
^_^Lena
Thank you so much. But I got this REALLY long review and I had to answer it. There are bits and pieces of what I’m answering.
YuYuHakushoLover
-Don\'t use ^text^ as actions. Don\'t even PUT actions in the quotations. Write like: \"I,\" kiss, \"love,\" kiss, \"you,\" kiss, \"Draco Malfoy.\" It is just easier to read.
-Don\'t smush things together. You go from Harry and Draco somewhat angry with each other to suddenly, Draco is all lovey-dovey.
-They aren\'t in character. Harry just isn\'t Harry. He doesn\'t react the way he should. And Draco is... like... meh. He\'s just not Draco. I see Draco, if he\'s trying to love Harry, getting confused and not knowing whether to follow his father or to love Harry. You go right from somewhat hating to \'I love you! Look at the GREAT room I made for us to fuck in! Shweeee!\' more or less. It\'s like oO\" Remember the facts about the characters = Draco equal cold bastard who if he ever loves someone he shouldn\'t (meaning not Pansy, etc.), then he fights with himself because he doesn\'t know whether to stay a Malfoy or to love whoever he wants like \'common folk.\' And Harry = tempermental teenager who is having soooo many troubles in his life.
-You go from Harry not knowing what a Christmas Wishing Star is to knowing how he was going to use it in like three lines. That\'s... not normal.
-If only ONE Christmas Wishing Star falls every THREE years, do you know how much it\'d cost? Like 1,000,000 galleons! And Lucius would grab it to make him supreme ruler, or Voldemort would steal one to make him supreme ruler with Harry dead... or something.
-It\'s Lily, not Lilly. And... she wouldn\'t be a ghost. If she were, then she would have seen Harry a LONG time ago. It\'d be something more like Ginny or Luna.
-Ron should be more than just confused. He should be mad or what not...
-Thoughts should be \'text\' or something similar, not in {} or it\'s confusing as it looks like messed up Author Notes.
-------=======-------========-----========
OK lemme say first off. I didn’t even bother to read over this fic before I posted it. My friend had it on her computer, sent it to me, and suggested I post it. So I did, and I only skimmed it. I know shame on me as a writer. BAD LENA! So all grammar and punctuation mistakes were a result of my skimming.
Anyway. The carrots were used because I uploaded once and then the whole file was in italics then I did the “quotes” and that messed up. SO I went back and fixed that and then the actions were gone. So I used the only think I of… the carrot thingies.
I didn’t want to make this a five part story where harry and draco analyse there feelings and then realise they want each other. I just wanted a cute fluffy story. So yea it did move face but only because of the fact it needed to. Who knows maybe there maybe a backlash from this and that might spark a sequal who knows.
This story happened BEFORE order of the phoenix, once agian this was written a while ago. So the only death that happened was cedric. And, unlike my other stories, the Dursleys weren’t as bad to harry as they could have been. So harry was a semi normal 17 year old who fell head over heels with someone they hate (don’t say it can’t be done! I’ve seen it happen.) Second. I was showing a different side of Draco. One that believes in the possibilities of fast love and fuck the consequences. Sure it\'s not good, but it\'s fiction!
Haven’t you gotten money and decided automatically you’re gonna try and get the one thing you want? Well if not I have, and I’d image Harry’d do the same. He’s impulsive, we all know that. And besides, normal is relative. What’s normal to you isn’t normal to me.
Ok, I admit I messed up that part. But just assume that Lucius has tried to attain one and failed. OR that they can be only used for good not evil. Or just assume he didn’t know about it. USE YOUR IMAGINATION!
The ghost thing was my doing. I just thought it would be sweet and everyone else didn’t have a problem with it. What if Lily was forbade to see Harry in ghost form, ever think of that? Suspend reality for three seconds and lighten up!
I don’t like Ron. I feel he’s more of a Crabbe and Goyle type when it comes to love (did you not read Goblet of Fire…. HELLO!). So of course he wouldn’t understand.
And finally the thoughts thing I’ve been doing for years and that’s the way I do it. Partly because most of my sites don’t do italics, another part because it’s how I write.
FINALLY I’d like to say that I know harry potter inside and out. I did a freaking paper on it in college. I know what I’m talking about. I have my opinions of harry and draco and so do you. Please don’t try and change my opinions and I won’t try and change yours.
ALSO! This is a FICLET! Not a big story, so of course it will move fast. Don’t like it, don’t read it.
I feel better now.
I wasn’t being a bitch, I just felt I had to say that.
^_^Lena