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that was sad.. if I was hermione, I wouldn\'t have taken sevv for granted. could\'ve jumpnto nto bed with him even if hye protested! haha! (gives a devilish smile)... that was too bad for sevv, that was just too new for their relationship and it already has gone bad. could you lessen the fights though i must admit the fights adds the spice. Conflict is an essence of a story. I applaud you for your good work and diversity.

Bad Hermione! Worse Severus!!!! I know there are more chapters coming so he can\'t capitulate QUITE yet, but she was naked and vulnerable and he just walked away?... Poor Hermione! Excellent chapter, but I\'m itchin\' for some more lemons right about now! Severus is such a bad, bad boy... I guess I\'ll just have to spank him harder next time. Thank you again for your wonderful work- it is the highlight of my night (and being a retail manager in America on the day after Thanksgiving- I NEED a highlight!).

Here I sit, sated and pleased ... how ironic that when I
originally entered the AFF update page and found the
literary endeavours I have been savaging perusing had
not submitted any new installments. As this occurs on
a random basis, I then look to see if there may be any
new tales to peak the interest and low and behold, I
run unto this work ... praise Merlin!

I have just spent several hours reading from the first
chapter to the ... jaw drops as Severus turns to walks
away from the open invitation of the shower drenched
auror [fade out] ... last submission of Chapter 22.

Firstly, to the author ... Huzzar! Thank you for taking
time out of your busy schedule to entertain and delight
others with your own t ont on many possibilities that
could take shape in the Wizarding World. The intrapersonal
and intropersonal perspectives between the characters are
top notch. The cell phone conversations were an amusing
addition and brought a deeper understanding for the reader
into the relationship. The scenes are descriptive, sensual and
vividly written ... which is a sign of one who makes every
attempt to let the reader see the story through the eyes of
the characters. This is always a plus for me. I have added
your FF to my list of recommendations.

Secondly, to the beta ... Thank you for all your efforts
in assisting to make this piece of literature more reader
friendly. The first six chapters were ugh ugh peruse and
your abilities have improves one\'s enjoyment. It is so
much nicer not have to figure out where one para ends
and another begins.

Thirdly, requested info about the reviewer ... female, age
thirty-seven, residing in Pennsylvania, US. Single mum of
three school age children [15, 13, 10]. Avid reader of HP
and many forms of HP FFs.

Finally, to the author ... Many thanks again for submitting
this literary endeavour. I will continue to look for future
updates to this saga [now knowing that the creative juices
are still flowing and the hopes for Chapters 23 thru 28 are
on the horizon]. Patiently awaiting ...

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Drowning Ophelia

OH NO, Where is he going?!? I do hope he isn\'t going to leave after what happened, she really does need him!!! They do both have so much pain in them, but I really think that htey are in fact each other\'s greatest remedy!!! Can\'t wait for chapter 23!!! HAPPY THANKSGIVING!!! De..^<..^<

P.S, Please don\'t ever worry about me, I totaly ADORE this story & will be here to the end!!! Do I see a sequel or prequel to this that will be telling about Lucius & Hermione\'s 6 months in the near future?

OH man...I hope that little hissy fit didnt scare Severus off. I know if I was him Id go running like my ass was on fire. LOL...but then its a good thing Im not him. They need each other. I hope they do get back together.

Love it so far

Red

Keep up the great work.It\'s really excellent!I just love it.Keep on writing.
PLEASE,PLEASE,PLEASE,PLEASE.

im sorry i wasn\'t able to review chappie 20. I just came home from a retreat. Yes, i am a religious person. NOT! anyway, chapter 20 is great! you made my day when you put bits and pieces bout lucius and hermione. it cleared up a lot of things. You wouldn\'nt tnt to know what i have been imagining. Ha! so severus is the jealous. I believe its hard to make hiom jealous because of his stoic nature but you portrayed him as someone who when jealous is very hard to get along with. I pity hermione then. Chater 20 is heart wrenching.

Cahpter 21 is very creative. you made them kiss and make up in a different way. Wait a minute,,, that was literal. I like how you made hermione out in this chapter. it proves even if she is hardcore she has feelings too... so about the last line... DO they have a relationship?

YAY!!!!!! Excellent chapter!!!!!!!!! I am very excited about the way this is going again. See, I KNEW Severus wasn\'t that big a bastard! And I am literally GRINNING that your writer\'s block is gone! I\'m so excited!! Perhaps I should lay off the caffiene, though...
I want more, please!
Updates, not caffiene.
But caffiene is okay, too, I guess.

Oh no - sappy Severus - I guess it had to go there, but I liked him so much better when he was biting (literally and figuratively). More, please.

YES, YES, YES, they are going to try to make a go of it!!! They are a perfect example of the saying; That which does not kill you can only make you stronger. Alone they are good, but together they will be GREAT!!!

I am so glad that you have been delivered from your writer\'s block!!! I look forward to what is yet to come in this story & for her to tell him about her time with Lucius!!! Til next chapter, Deb >^..^<

P.S., I have been giving some thought to trying my hand at a story here, but it will have to wait until after the holidays. I have a pretty vivid imagination & can picture the tied to the chair thing quite clearly;-) I could only hope that I could do as well as some of my favorite authors here*