You do realize that technically this is rape? The first time she was drugged, essentially given the wizarding equivalent of a roofie. Then she was taken against her will, and tied down, not once giving her consent. Just because her body reacted doesn't mean it wasn't rape. Rapists often try to make the victim orgasm. It helps them justify their actions, and makes the victim feel exceptionally worse for "enjoying" it. You come right out and say, "it's not rape or anything like that" but clearly there was nothing consensual here. I would change your labels if I were you. At least put non con in your tags intro because otherwise this is very misleading. Not trying to be a downer or anything, but lots of people are sensitive to such things and a heads up would be appreciated.
I just read the first chapter and although its good there are some serious spelling errors that you need to sort here. :)
hm, seems like your writing is a bit rushed, with the mistakes I've come across (new instead of knew). Another example; "But he needed a way to get her where he wanted her," shouldn't it be "But he needed a way to get her where she wanted him,"? And why does Draco refer to her as mudblood if he wants to seduce her?
If you don't have a beta, find one. If you do have one, get a new one.
"he knew she was thinking about her
I don't think Draco would ever ever ever let Crabbe and Goyle have Hermione - not when he's so obsessesd and why'd did she have to endure that - UGH - at least Zabini is HOT and then Theo is cute but Crabbe and Goyle - UGH! Yeah, not sure where the story is going but if I were Hermione, I'd file rape charges and tell Draco to go screw himself.
Question: How was Hermione a challenge for Draco if it only took him one night and a potion no less to get her in his bed?
-Myth
oh jesus awesome awesome awsome we need more stories like this please write more immediately its so awesome
Please update this fanfic. It's so different and quite interesting, ignore your flames. What a bitch!!!!!!, anyway please please update.
Absolutely atrocious! Get spell check! Get a beta! Neville Longbottom, not Nevile. I mean seriously, learn how to spell. If you are going to use the character, spell the name right! I noticed your penname on here is Natrasha. Key word in that...TRASH! You should really take this story down, have a beta go through it a couple hundred times, and then put it back up. IF you are going to write, take pride in it. Don't just post drivel like this and expect everyone to love it. Because those that have eyes, and some sort of concept of grammar are probably offended by it! I know I am! I may just have to report this story...see if it can be taken down because it's author is entirely inept at comprehending grammar and spelling.
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