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December 4, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Wow! Great Story so far. I Feel that it is only going to get better here on out. Can you please send me a email when the next chapter is up? If so i really like that. I have a hard time finding this other wise. My Email is bloodrose2 @ hotmail .com Just put what the name of the story is so i don't throw it away. Thanks and keep up the really great work.
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March 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
please update and email me or else. :-P
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February 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i like the story please keep updating!!!
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June 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Great story! Can\'t wait to see more! Please email me when you update:)
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April 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
omg UPDATE please
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March 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
\"Mr. Malfoy I assure you I am quiet cable of taking care of myself, I don\'t think a vampire will hurt me, or at least this one.\" Harry said amusement clear.
Example of dismal word usage.
Quiet : not loud
Cable: A strong, large-diameter, heavy steel or fiber rope.
Something that resembles such steel or fiber rope.
QUITE : intense
CAPABLE: able
Example of dismal punctuation.
Harry said amusement clear.
There is NO punctuation in this phrase. Is Harry speaking? \"Amusement clear\" It makes no sense, but then neither does the sentence.
Harry said, amusement clear. What was clear about the amusement? Was it in his voice? Was there a sign over his head? Was there a park with rides? Be clear and concise
Try
\"Mr. Malfoy, I assure you I am quite capable of taking care of myself. I don\'t think a vampire will hurt me, at least this one.\" Harry said, with amusement in his voice.
Commas are a good thing.
Please, please get a beta. Please let your English teacher grade this. Please get help from someone. At the very least use the grammar and spelling check in Word.
Example of dismal word usage.
Quiet : not loud
Cable: A strong, large-diameter, heavy steel or fiber rope.
Something that resembles such steel or fiber rope.
QUITE : intense
CAPABLE: able
Example of dismal punctuation.
Harry said amusement clear.
There is NO punctuation in this phrase. Is Harry speaking? \"Amusement clear\" It makes no sense, but then neither does the sentence.
Harry said, amusement clear. What was clear about the amusement? Was it in his voice? Was there a sign over his head? Was there a park with rides? Be clear and concise
Try
\"Mr. Malfoy, I assure you I am quite capable of taking care of myself. I don\'t think a vampire will hurt me, at least this one.\" Harry said, with amusement in his voice.
Commas are a good thing.
Please, please get a beta. Please let your English teacher grade this. Please get help from someone. At the very least use the grammar and spelling check in Word.
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March 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Are you going to finish this story? I really like what you have up so far. I\'d like to see what happens next
Merrideth
Merrideth
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January 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Awsomory ory so far! I can\'t wait to see what happens.
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January 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh i love it, awesome!
hope you update soon and when you do, please send me a mail, Thanks
hope you update soon and when you do, please send me a mail, Thanks
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January 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hi!
I really like this story. the thing with evil order of the phoenix AND evil Voldie with Harry and friends in the middle is interesting. Do you intent on continuing? whould be really good.
I really like this story. the thing with evil order of the phoenix AND evil Voldie with Harry and friends in the middle is interesting. Do you intent on continuing? whould be really good.