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for Dangerous efforts.

by Vierveijzer

person amethyst
schedule August 3, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Please post chapter 6 soon!!!!
person Lynn
schedule August 1, 2003 at 12:00 AM
This is really interesting and follows my impression of Snape\'s character and how he would react. Keep up the good work, I am looking forward to new chapters!!
person Kiristeen
schedule July 30, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Poor Hermione! LOL She was *so* sure she\'d got caught out! : )~ I look forward to reading more.


Kiri
person levans
schedule July 30, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Ayla,
You need to work on preposistions. Watch singular to plural verb usage. Always capitalize names of characters. I enjoyed the plot, it seems fun(why else would I read it? I am curious to learn your interpretation of the underwear scene. Perhaps my best advice to you would be to proof-read out loud. If it sounds stilted, or not quite right, then some work may be needed. (also I have noticed missing words in sentences, where if added make sense, but missing leave me scratching my head. Your fellow writer
L. Evans
person Inge
schedule July 30, 2003 at 12:00 AM
woohowwwwwwwww snape leaning against walls is always a nice picture LOL -oeps sorry ;) -
update soon pleaaaaaaaaase

hugs
person Hurricane
schedule July 30, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Oh my goodneshe the tension between Snape and Hermione and my curiosity about what Hermione will find when she goes back in time, is driving me crazy (in a good way). Update soon....please! Great story so far.
person Darkfaith
schedule July 29, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I\'m terribly interested in what happens when she uses the time turner. Get to it already!!! Sorry, I\'m impatient when I read stuff I like.
person Corazon
schedule July 29, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Maddy,
Good story. I an very interested
to read about your version of the
grey underpants. Keep updating!

Hugs,
Corazon
person Andrian
schedule July 29, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Ah the plot begins to thicken. Lupin and Lavender? Interesting sideline there and thanks for the seperation of the structure!

By the way have you seen the pics of Lupin in PoA? Shudders. Sigh will hold to my own ideas of what Lupin looks like....

Cheers
person amethyst
schedule July 29, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Really, Really looking forward to her going back in time! Love time-turner fics!