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September 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Okay. The idea for the story was interesting enough and the writing fairly acceptable. But there are some serious problems with the fic:
1. The plot was underdeveloped. There was no meat, nothing to sink your teeth into. Gratuitous sex, unless it
1. The plot was underdeveloped. There was no meat, nothing to sink your teeth into. Gratuitous sex, unless it