rate_review Reviews

Alright. I hate to tell you this, but that story was *quite* unrealisitic. What kind of girl would want to shag her former rapist of two years? And honestly, if Dra-- er, Malfoy-- had done that... *thing* to Ginny numerous times, she would certainly have bled to death extremely quickly. You never really explained exactly *why* Harry\'s conscience returned to him when it did; as you wrote it, the story focued around a completely out-of-the blue matter. In addition, wouldn\'t Lord Harold have killed all those who opposed him, including Hagrid, Flitwick, Hooch, etc? And most of all, there\'s the question you never answered, which destroyed your story: *Why was Harry behaving so?* As Lord Harold, I mean. And also, according to JKR, Harry\'s actual name is, in fact, *Harry*, and not *Harold.* Grammatical and spelling errors flooded your story, and while I understand that the story was probably written just so you could write a sex scene (believe me, I know!!!), the plot should have been sculptured thoroughly, very like many of the aff.net stories, such as those written by my personal favorite author, Starkindler. (Apologies for any embarrassment on said author\'s part.)

I love this story, I hope that you will at least think about finishing it.

This was a really good story.

Is there more to come or is that it.

Is there more about Harry trying to clean up the world.

Will he come across Dumbledore and McGonagall? I also can\'t imagine Ron being too forgiving if he\'s still alive. He\'ll most likely try to kill him and yell at Hermione for being with Harry aftll hll he did.

I really hope there\'s more to come.

(I loved that Hagrid still believed in Harry after all that time)

Cheers

I like the diffrent storyline and hope u continue to write more with not making us wait to long lol
PS that is the one thing I do not like is when the writer never finishes the story line Shelley

wonderful keep it comming

Hey, your matrix is quite good. You know what I mean. Just don\'t set fire to any of the common rooms, big McG will punish you and not me, your accomplise. Well, anyways my review:

Some of the spelling and grammer is bad, but for a story of this nature, it doesn\'t really matter. Quite good stuff. Not the best, but room for improvement exists. If this is a smut tale, there doesn\'t seem to be much around. I\'ve read worse, and you add lots of description to the characters rather to their actions, which gets a clear mental picture in your mind. Didn\'t like your torture to Luna, my fav chick who\'d I bang if she was real. Torture is evil, at least you made the evil torturer die. Add Snape SOMEWHERE. He\'s got to be around to make it Harry Potter. Some OOC exists, but not as much as mine, and in other words, it\'s quite good, with some room for improvement. 3.5/5 (4 + are closer, so you get that)

You know for people who have been tortured they are mighty forgiving.

Yikes that\'s scary; good, but scary. the beginning is a bit hazy. i hope you\'ll clear it up later.

My god that fic is so sad.............................
I hope Harry hasn\'t raped Hermione, so he could still be with her in the end even if it wasn\'t really him.
PLease update soon!!!

The beginning is supposed to be hazy. Don\'t worry.

And yes, Lord Harold did rape Hermione. But she dosen\'t hold it against Harry. Yes, he\'s gonna get... Not tellin. :)