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AHHHHH....... I saw that there was another chapter and i started freaking out I have been on pins and needles for the next chapter and i guess i still will be but I am patient (jumps up and down) so i hope you post as soon as posssible.
Peace Out Kagome Rain

ve yve your story plz finish thanks

Snape... naughty boy! I really look forward to your next chapter; can you upload soon?

I love this story, please keep it going. Oh, and this little part is a very good bit of writing:
\"A stark figure stood within the vastness of large Dungeon doors, his inured draconian expression was almost intrinsic, and the glaring light behind him, sharply delineating his daunting stance seemed but a faint flicker against his ascetic stature. Snape

please update your writing style is really amazing please update as soon as you can cause i am on pins and needles waiting for the next chapter.(runs around in anticipation)

hey i just read your story and i got ta say........... it was a little confusing at first then as i read it i started to see where it all was leading up to. VERY NICE! I am enjoying it so far plz keep up the good work cant wait to read more from ya.....

Best Wish\'s,
Gado The Lion Almighty

I LOVE THIS STORY! It\'s an really cool idea. Lets see some action!

Totally awesome story!!! You\'ve got me all ready for the sex, now write it! I can practically feel the sexual tension through the computer. This is a great story!!!

I just wanted to tell you I really do love this story. You are obviously a good writer, no problems with grammar or spelling and a good flow.

I think that you manage to portray the charachters very well and I don\'t think that they are unrealistic (apart from what comes with the Harry Potter world of course...). Many HG/SS fanfics seem to become very typical and the people are always the same. Perfect Hermione and pleasant, misunderstood Snape. You manage to avoid this by giving them \"normal\" personalities in line with JK Rowlings; it\'s marvellous.

An other big difference to common HG/SS fanfiction is that you don\'t forget the other characters in the story. I love that you actually \"introduce\" Professor Sinistra to us. It gives the whole thing a perfect twist - she feels like a mature adult and gives us a view on professor Snape that many people neglect. Wonderful.

Hermione is given a strong personality but is not perfect. She has bushy hair (everyone seems to make it beautiful) and sometimes can\'t control her temper. You make her a real person, someone you can relate to.

Snape keeps his personality from the books very well. I hate when he turns into a softie. For example, him slamming Hermione into a tree sounds just like something he would do in that situation .

Ron and Harry are also people that we can relate to (is it just me o we we see less of Harry in this?). Ron\'s temper is just like in the books, perfectly in charachter.

The storyline progresses at a good pace, it\'s realistic and you have obviously worked a great deal on this. You keep us on the edge, building up the tension.

I might have thought it was a bit \"hasty\" when Hermione ends up among the Death Eaters but that might also be intended. It could be beacuse Hermione experiences it that way. Also, comments about the characters hair seem to be common, intended?

All in all though this is one of the best pieces of fanfiction I have ever read. Your writing is highly convincing. This is how I would write a HG/SS fanfiction if I could (too bad I\'m not as good as I would like to be). Especially Snape is just the way I picture him.

I\'ll definetly be waiting for more of this.
All the best,
Florence

that was seriously evil!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

what a great story so far...

but please tell me what is going on between snape and sinistra please

could you let me know when you update again

thanx

M.