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July 2, 2022 at 12:00 AM
I love this story so far. I hope the next one is just as good.
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April 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I don\'t know why you worry about your writing so much Ash. This is a very good story. It went a little fast in a couple of spots, but I know it is easy to get eager and jump ahead to the juicy bits :P I suffer the urge myself. Now I need to set aside enough time to read your other fics.
Good story!
Good story!
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March 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Okay, so I only read the first chapter as tha all all I have time for today, but I will read the rest of it. You\'ve got a good solid start, and I\'m impressed with the way you have Harry handling his grief. I\'ll add whatever I think of as I go along.
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August 16, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Hmm...
Well this story was likable at first. I mean don\'t get me wrong, it\'s a great story and started out real strong. But there were a few things I did find wrong with it other then spelling errors (No Worries: They are not important.)
1. The ending. Sapping. Too friggin sappy, although that as sappy as the gay ass Two-Sided Mirror sappy ending. (Unless you wish to loose brain cells, NEVER READ THAT STORY...)
2. Okay, the whole thing with Draco/Becoming a Death Eater thing. That was a good storyline aka conflict but it wasn\'t really well written. What I mean is: What was the motive behind trying to force him in becoming a Death Eater? Cause I didn\'t see one, other then YOU WILL JOIN ME UWHEHEHE! B-O-R-I-N-G. I mean he wasn\'t even bait...although bait is yes, done to death but still...couldn\'t he have been important or something?
3. Where\'s the rest of the story? I mean, it seems like there should be more to the story or more like, you left out some stuff. Everything happened far to quickly and took away from the story, you know?
4. Your Voldemort...not very Voldemorty. ( Yeah, that\'s right, Voldemorty...) I mean he was evil yeah...but with the fight at the end, he ran away too friggin much and depending too much on the dementors. And again, the thing with Draco...that really took away from the story, I\'m sorry...
I\'m really not trying to be rude or anything, just giving you critism. It really was pretty good, but the ending really lacked.
-C
Well this story was likable at first. I mean don\'t get me wrong, it\'s a great story and started out real strong. But there were a few things I did find wrong with it other then spelling errors (No Worries: They are not important.)
1. The ending. Sapping. Too friggin sappy, although that as sappy as the gay ass Two-Sided Mirror sappy ending. (Unless you wish to loose brain cells, NEVER READ THAT STORY...)
2. Okay, the whole thing with Draco/Becoming a Death Eater thing. That was a good storyline aka conflict but it wasn\'t really well written. What I mean is: What was the motive behind trying to force him in becoming a Death Eater? Cause I didn\'t see one, other then YOU WILL JOIN ME UWHEHEHE! B-O-R-I-N-G. I mean he wasn\'t even bait...although bait is yes, done to death but still...couldn\'t he have been important or something?
3. Where\'s the rest of the story? I mean, it seems like there should be more to the story or more like, you left out some stuff. Everything happened far to quickly and took away from the story, you know?
4. Your Voldemort...not very Voldemorty. ( Yeah, that\'s right, Voldemorty...) I mean he was evil yeah...but with the fight at the end, he ran away too friggin much and depending too much on the dementors. And again, the thing with Draco...that really took away from the story, I\'m sorry...
I\'m really not trying to be rude or anything, just giving you critism. It really was pretty good, but the ending really lacked.
-C
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August 6, 2003 at 12:00 AM
*evil laugh and appears within a thick crimson fog, her voice echoed.* It is I
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July 24, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Yeah, I enjoyed this story! It was good except for a few grammar mistakes, (but everybody spells bad in in a while; its not a big thing, just decided to point it out before someone else *_*) I can\'t wait to read more of your writing, including HP salsh!
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July 21, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Just because you ended it doesn\'t mean I don\'t want to read more of it. I hereby command you to continue!!!!!
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July 20, 2003 at 12:00 AM
HEHEHE!!! I am grinning for ear to ear here!!! Yay!! that was great!! I helped name the owl go me! go me! This was so great!! I love happy endings!!!! YAYYAYYAYYAY! And they won\'t have to be with the stupid Dursleys for much longer!!! Thank You Very Much ;) ~>mc~>
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July 20, 2003 at 12:00 AM
a happy ending =)
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July 19, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I really love this story, and I can\'t wait to read much more of it. I also cant wait to see were you\'re going with Draco sing ing the summer ae Due Dursley\'s home. It may be the single most sweet and horrible thing to happen. Great Fics, can\'t wait for more!!!