rate_review Reviews

I was intrigued by Harry\'s transformation into a girl, and Draco and Harry finally gng tng to express their feelings under this unusual circumstance.

There were some lovely intimate moments between them such as the lingerie shopping, tenderness in the library, and bedroom scenes. There were also some humourous moments as Harry tried adjusting to the change. However, the writing had some serious deficiencies, which the author acknowledged. I\'m not sure if English is the author\'s native language.

The author mentioned getting a beta reader around chapter seven. Err, in that case, either the beta reader did an incomplete job or the author missed some corrections because I still encountered problems. The upside being the writing did show some improvements since the earlier chapters. Speaking of the earlier chapters, I would\'ve recommended the beta get with the author and revise them asl.
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Full comments posted at http://groups.yahoo.com/group/glassesreflect/message/11529 and http://groups.yahoo.com/group/glassesreflect/message/11536

One beta forum can be found at http://www.fictionalley.org/fictionalleypark/forums/forumdisplay.php?s=&forumid=18

I am so loving your story
it is nice to read a story that isnt just falling out and making up with who ever happily accepting being parents etc even though they are teens, dont lose that great realism ;)
if you want a baby for them I always thought they would make a nice girl, blond with green eyes ;) the alouff malfoy look with the passion of the potters ;)
ant way my ideas ;) keep wng
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lol biblios

PLEASE update! I\'m in love with the story and can\'t wait to see what happens next. I seem to be in the minority, but I think that Harry should have a girl. It would be hilarious to see the 2 guys try to take care of a girl. Maybe Harry\'s brief stint as a girl would help him relate lol

I totally disagree with tbe people who thought the male preg ruined the story. I think male preg stories (while strange) are awesome! And you are doing a great job of explaing how it works biologically. I really want to know what\'s going to happen next!

yeah...i like it! keep updating! Oh yeah...i
want to see them have a boy with Malfoy
hair, and Potter eyes...lol

ok first thing first.... LOVE THE STORY *giggle* and making harry preggers is what you wanted right sooooo good on ya. i mean unfortunately many of the authors are afraid to write what they want because of assholes with small minds. your story is just that YOUR story. i would like to thank you for of course sharing it with all of us. and those of us who have of course fallen in love with it will read it to it\'s end and then make the descision of whether or not is was done well at that point in time. i lik the way you did it too. you didn\'t bring it up until the transion. you introduced girl harry with her(his) own problems and led us through that with no added overload. now that harry is boy harryi would have to admit just him pining over draco seemed rather bland but now we have a new scenerio of trouble starting predictaments. i ahve to admit you did this beautifully. stay true to your muse and self and continue to write your story as you see it should go. and personally a boy would be wonderful ( a little draco/harry look alike running around calling harry mommy is to damn cute) just go with our gut and i am sure that the more adult readers who simply like the story will continue to read. good luck and please please update soon
Sincerely and with best wishes, Jaimi

Girl! I love your story and its a fine idea with the pregnacy.
I actually laghed quite a bit over this chapter, so I think you should up date soon...
Keep up the good spirit!
Love
Hexia

who cares if HArry is preg. this is a killer good story, and i think they should havea agirl with white hair like Draco and green eyes like Harry she should be good at placing the part of seeker be in slytherine\'s house but be more like Harry. cool...e amil and let me know i\'ll be surprised when i read it, just cause i know ahead of time doesnt mean i\'ll be laee surprised!!!

I want Harry and Draco to have a boy!!! Also, Harry getting pregnant has kept me wanting to read the story to find out what happens to H/D. I am happy to see that Draco is back at Hogwarts. Now I am waiting to see how you are goingt o keep him there when Lucious finds out, and how he is going to react to Harry being preggers. Well I hope that you update soon, and don\'t worry the people who don\'t like the story because Harry is pregnant are missing out on a really fabulous story. Their loss, not yours.

I for one am glad that you added the pregnancy. As a writer I follow the story, which sometimes agrees with my ideas. Other times my stroy goes into its own th Pe People need to deal or stop reading. Though, I think it would have been easier if th potion had not worked and Harry remained a girl for the pregnancy.

Also, I hope you bring Lucius and Narcissa around. I think they are lovely people away from Voldie. And you never told us what Lucius said about Harry being able to parically being able to see the hidden manor house.

Now this chapter: I am mad about Harry hating Draco. You made Draco sound so dumb. Hello. Harry is pregnant and distraught. That is not the time for Honesty. I was so tired of Draco feeling he should be honest tim time like this. HE is a SLYTHERIN honesty should be the last thing on his mind. 1. You had Malprey leave the room, before she gave her talk I thought draco had something useful to say, all he said was crap. Draco should have calmed Harry down, got him to relax. Draco should not of your used words which refered to the baby as only Harry. Yes, he is confused, yes they re young, but upsetting Harry will not make you less confuse. All he had to do is is say, no Harry, I don\'t want you to remove our baby. Things are going to be hectic and yes we are young, but we will get through it. THat is the mind of a Slytherin. Draco was acting like a muggle n. n. Somehow, I don\'t see Draco harping on age, since he has money and voldie is gone. I see him worrying about how his father is going to take it.