First chapter is good so far. It draws you right in.
Please correct your disclaimer.
Your disclaimer doesn't have one of the two parts we need to see. It must say that no money/profit is made. Saying that it’s just for fun or just for entertainment purposes is not enough.
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I hope you keep writing!
I was so excited and surprised to see new content that was well written and enjoyable. Great job!
I am really excited to see what is next! This sounds like it will be a really sensual and thrilling pairing! Please update soon!