Hi, So I've now read the whole story up to current. Lookng forward to the next installment. It's very well written.... although I don't think I would have made the same choices you made.
After Draco and Hermione built a relationship by letter and became closer and closer as she confided in him WHY would she just casually give her virginity to Krum who was never very emotionally available nor did he have much to say to her including letters? Not to mention that there was virtually no foreplay which would ENSURE that her first time would be painful when she might have been more lubricated and relaxed if there were oral sex involved.
BTW.... You did an OUTSTANDING JOB of making me like Draco after the way he behaved in the films.... he was very unlikable and you made me want HIM to be Hermione's first. Seems like he cared more about her pleasure and he deserved the reward.
The thing between Neville and Ron.... esssh I don't get that but it's cool
It might have been interesting to experiment with Harry and Ginny.... Maybe she's attracted to one of the Quiddich players.... Maybe Harry's inexperience in the bedroom is frustrating and hearing all the wild talk from one or more of the other girls on the team might make her stray.... Or maybe IF Ron had convinced Hermione to take him back right away and Lavender was distraught (in a moment of weakness a couple too many butterbeers....) Harry kisses her and they fool around and Ginny finds out and cheats on him as payback. "You'll not treat me the way Ron treats Hermione!"
Also you kind of led into something with Luna bluntly asking Hermione about sex and her virginity and you didn't do anything with that. Maybe Hermione is in the tub trying to masturbate unsuccessfully and Luna reaches in and gives her a helping hand..... startling her but just the same.... she might just let Luna play with her. Maybe after she cums.... Luna convinces her to come out of the tub for oral sex to show Hermione what is out there for her from the girls and boys.
Regardless..... I LOVE what you have done with the characters and I hope to see some more interesting developments.
KUDOS!!!!
Not sure how I’m feeling about Luna at the moment, but I know I’m feeling sorry for Ron, please update chapter 26 soon.
Just finished the series up to this point and I gotta say please keep going! Love the writing
Interesting story, please update chapter 25 soon.
Poor kid! Though, to be fair, most first times are terrible. 😬 I’m glad Harry is genuinely trying to succeed on his own and Ron is enjoying trying his hand at teaching. Enjoyed the update, as always!
Hermione the Pure. She truly is the most innocent of everyone. Tell that hubby that he’s free to write a page or two as well 😂 I enjoyed the first official day of class, & I’m looking forward to the next update as always!
By Jove, I think she’s got it! 😅 The greatest thing I enjoy is that someone is always getting caught! Thank you for continuing to write 😊! This is the one update that I cannot wait to see.
The plot thickens! Krum?! Yes ma’am! Ron being bi?! Need more! This made my night... & I’ll say it again for all of those who continue to read and don’t comment: we’re coming back for a reason. Don’t let one person get to you: we’re enjoying not only your consistency, but your attempt at a new plot from the same old same old. It’s fan fiction: dealer’s choice because none of it is absolutely canon outside of what JK writes!
I’m cracking up because I just know that someone heard him say her name! Loved the fantasy! Hopefully you remember above all that this is your story Hunn! We’re just here for the ride in your imagination!
ok ron i can understanf not being good for him but draco is definitely not. i have know idea why people try to romanticize draco when from the very beginning he's a dick. while he may not be a stone cold killer he was without a doubt a bad person.