Thank you for writing and sharing your stories.
I love this story so much, and I am sad to see it go. But also very happy that you are writing a sequel and I will be here waiting patiently until that one is published.
:)
SG214
Sorry to hear about your mum being sick but glad it seems to be working out OK.
Good ending to the story. Bloody and violent but tidied things up. Still a pity that Ron was one of the villains as he too often seems to be. However a good love scene at the end.
Have a happy holiday.
Saxman66
Re: End of Chapter 15
Well, that was a twist. O_O
Now that was interesting, including the twist at the end. Was not expecting Narcissa to be involved. Nor such a strong reaction from Hermione that the normally law obeying character is considering killing Ron rather than have him got to trial and be punished. Ron actually showed some creativity in using the curse on himself so that he overcame his moral scruples about using it on Hermione.
We also have an hint that something supernatural was involved in the original incident with the tornado doing so much damage. If so is that an additional factor/person at play as seems odd that Narcissa would be acting against her own son that early and I don't think Ron would have the skill or power even if he had the motivation.
The blood issue is interesting. In normal transfers it has a limited life-span but there could be longer term effects, especially when your talking about two powerful mages.
Looking forward to seeing how things develop from here. Possibly a very good thing Harry has turned up as not sure what happens if it gets violent now.
Well that was a bit rocky at 1st but they have got back together fairly well, only for Ginny to interrupt with that warning. Hopefully they will get out before he comes and Ron won't think of the ruins. Can either of them be located by spells however? Or Ron, if he is the one responsible, reactive the curse from a distance? If not and Draco has some cards on him once at the ruins they could travel by muggle means and probably it would be very difficult for Ron to find them. Anyway another good chapter.
Possibly I was wrong on the syntax in the last chapter as too long since I did English, but it just didn't sound right. No problem either way.
Yet again, the plot thickens. ^_^
Well that was a messy kidnapping which is probably all too realistic, and Draco probably got enough attention Ron at least will suspect him with regards to Hermione's disappearance, which could cause some problems. However it seems to have just about worked out. He's going to have fun calming her down without someone, probably him, getting hurt I suspect. ;)
I did notice a couple of oddities.
a) Talking about the stadium you have “disapparition is band “ but presume that should be banned?
b) Near the end you had “Draco's long legs were no match for Hermione and he was catching up fast “. Shouldn't that be “Hermione was no match for Draco's long legs...” as the current way sounds off.
Now the big question. Can Draco hold Hermione long enough for the curse to wear off? Plus if that happens do they find out who was responsible?
Looking forward to seeing how things develop. :D
Well it definitely sounds like Hermione is under the curse. Of course kidnapping her could be easier said than done as she's not likely to take it kindly even if weakened by the curse. Nor be that friendly to Draco when she realised its him doing the napping. As I say I don't know enough about the spell to know how quickly and effectively she will come out of it but presumably could take a while before she's not only recovered and accepts she was under a spell.
I rather hope its not Ron but doesn't really look like any other candidates as Ms Tate died in the tornado, unless that's not the case. She's the only other character in the story who has a motive for such actions. If he is innocent he will definitely be frantic about her disappearance and I wonder how Ginny and Harry will handle that? Doubt they can tell him the truth – “we think you were cursing her” - but won't want to leave him worrying, especially since he might do something drastic to try and find her?
Like the display of a very angry Ginny and the way Harry has been overridden by his wife. :)
Looking forward to seeing how things develop.
This story is SO good that every time I see a new chapter has been uploaded, I get really excited. Knowing that I am going to read a new wonderful addition to the story that you have written.
Also, I love the whole imperious thing you have going on right now and I can't wait for the next chapter.