It's a good start to your story. Characters seem really accurate to Canon. Looking forward to reading the next section 😀
Please correct your disclaimer.
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I really like the story but the grammar and spelling errors are frustrating and sadly turning me away from this read... Do you need a Beta to edit? I'd like to offer my services, drop me a line at stephaniej1990@gmail.com if you are interested!
Awesome read so far!