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for The Broken Gamer

by Whoremione

schedule January 26, 2018 at 12:00 AM

Interesting concept. Can’t wait to read about her progress. Do you think she will come across Draco on her journey? I think you grammar is quite good. If you are open to suggestions, you could change 'theirs our cum' to 'there's our cum'. Also, Harry’s blood was fuelling at one point instead of flowing - unless that is a legit saying I am unfamiliar with. Looking forward to more updates. Curious as to why Harry is in such swanky surroundings. Cheers.