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for Narcissa Militant

by Lomonaaeren

schedule August 17, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Ch7 - Loved the line where Narcissa told Lucius he wouldn't see her again, and all that that implied about his future! Yay for Narcissa sorting out Barty Crouch Jr without having to go through the whole of GoF with him. And Harry was so adorable, fessing up to having left two substances in the bed. SP

schedule August 3, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Ch6: I loved poor Narcissa here, throwing her eyes to the ceiling, wondering why she was the only sane one. Just such a fun image. And Lucius seems to have enjoyed his punishment. SP

schedule July 30, 2017 at 12:00 AM

ooo I like this dark side of Narcissa but I'm not sure about Lucius. He seems too much like a lapdog.

Back to reading!

 

schedule July 30, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Will there be more? I'd really like to see the end of this one!

person SParker
schedule July 29, 2017 at 12:00 AM

about #5...

You couldn't write crack to save your life! :-p

You're too serious-minded, sarcastic wit is more your speed. I think you should focus on the subtle humor that happens too fast for people to catch.....and start doing stories that start off one way but was going in another direction all along, i. e ''Keep It Simple Stupid''.

You're good at it when you put your mind to it.

schedule July 28, 2017 at 12:00 AM

CH5 - I love Narcissa's internal dialogue - so sloppy - just brilliant! And I think Lucius may just regret that letter he sent! SP

person SParker
schedule July 22, 2017 at 12:00 AM

about #4..

I gotta say...this story definitely has a different tone from your other stories...

schedule July 21, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Oh she was mean to Severus! (Hilarious, btw). Loving that Harry is being trained in the Art too. More please! SP

schedule July 21, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Very delightful.You make the best aspect of Narcissa even better

schedule July 14, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Definitely it was!!!' my friend!!!  great story and for me Narcissa just found the best solution to Tom Riddle 's diary and Lockhart at the same time! Well done!!!!