Great chapter! I still love your descriptions and metaphors.
The discovery that he was a Motulomens wasn’t as surprising as it should have been. - ok, I get it now :)
And the reason she had to know was both simple and complicated - this is put mildly
I love their interaction, how he is surrendering to her seduction and participating actively in it.
She was there for him to claim her . . . to make her his. - but didn't he done that already, didn't he showed her that she is...if she wants?
His own eyes were closed and his head tilted back in the throes of ecstasy. - I just love this visual
“Severus . . . were you at the book group?” - so the question is WHO was he in the group as well, she was there, so...she must have seen him, talked to him and not knowing...
“Tell me. I deserve to know.” - and she's done it....she really likes to ask the right question at the worse possible time, does she?
I know this is late and sadly not my usual...but my brain is on vacation and refuses to think (at least until Monday when work starts again).
Please take care of yourself :*
Until the next chapter love&hugs&kisses
No, no improvement yet. Doctor's office still hasn't called. But I'm getting some writing done in the meantime.
or between her legs where she refused to Scourgify the glaze of their combined essences from her inner thighs.--Love this description.
resting upon the downy curve of his pelvis like a codpiece . . . protecting, claiming . . . and finally . . . sleeping.-- Unh! So good. And now I want to be his official cod piece.
Someone was hiding—close to her—but always beyond her reach.--Yeah, I'm guessing it's herself. She's always looking to others for answers.
What the hell is going on with the book? Is it about whomever is reading it? Did Snape read it? If he did, did he read about her or him?
But Hermione lifted her legs, walking her heels up his white shirt, from his abdomen to his chest, before wriggling herself closer until her buttocks were nestled against his groin and she could feel the bold heat of his cock pressing into her cleft.--oh gods, this is so delicious!
(Free fall isn't hyphenated.)
cock completely motionless but throbbing inside her like a nuclear warhead. -- Hahahaha! Great comparison.
A stroke or two later, his substantial balls clenched and his shaft reared in his grip, driving a powerful stream of ejaculate in a long, glistening trail across her abdomen. AND further lashings of warm seed painting her breasts, trickling down her ribs and drizzling into her navel.-- Lovely wording.
“Who are they, Severus? Who are you spying for?”--Whatwhatwhat? WTF is going on? I'm so confused.
And desperate for answers.
I need more! You're killing me (and I'm already halfway there, so it won't take much to finish me off). Now I have to rethink what she said at the start of the chapter. BTW, is Montulomens derived from something else? I tried to search for similar words but couldn't find anything.
Dammit! I wan't to copy and paste this entire fucking chapter back to you. The whole thing was so beautifully written. The word-gasms were plentiful.
it felt like a safe detonation, a controlled explosion--love this.
"And after all that had happened between them, she no longer feared his judgement. She could release without expecting repercussions."--Because he's the master facilitator :)
"Against her lips he was the flesh of a peach, a ripe bud that she needed to open, her tongue tipping tentatively out to taste his sweet juncture, slipping along the seam, searching for an opening."--I actually love this whole paragraph, but this was my favorite line in it. Soooo tasty :P
"in the same way as he was masterfully commandeering her pussy with each flexion of his muscular thigh."--Unnnh!
"But not like this—a knot of such intense need that it could only be expressed with her most visceral exposure—with everything on the inside wanting to come out, to smother him, claiming him as her own, or even pulling him in to be part of her."--Yeeeees. She's getting to the core of her desires with him.
(slipping off his coat before Wandlessly flicking open the remaining buttons of his shirt and discarding both.--I don't think you need to capitalize wandlessly.)
"chipped porcelain of his skin"--Great description.
"It was so different to anything that had come before . . . so much more extreme because it felt real, like the proper consummation of a relationship."--More of that same realization of her true nature with him (and him with her). So good :)
"silky sash across her skin, like a peep show, tantalising snippets of lips and tongue toying with the stark profile of her nipple."--Great visual.
"a Portkey directly to the core of her being."--Lovely :)
"She would feed him from her body forever, if she could watch him as he was right now, milky eyelids fallen closed, dark lashes fluttering gently as he consumed her with abandon."--Gah! So good :P (more drooling).
"Now the other slid up to her belly, little finger touching the heel of his other hand, while his thumb rested on her clitoris. It was as though he was deliberately connecting all of her most sensitive bundles,"--This whole section was awesome.
"she allowed herself to be taken, consumed by each sensation without wishing for it to be anything more or less than it was . . . acceptance . . . acceptance . . . and it began to feel glorious, transcendental, like every molecule of her body was being recruited, slowly brought into alignment with the centre of her being."--Ah! The acceptance (in all it's incarnations in this story) takes center stage; and she receives what she needs at long last.
"He came up behind her, close, the warm, silken head of his cock brushing against her buttocks"--Mmmm!
Unnnh! And I loved the whole trust fall scene. Poignant and hot. Yummy!
"and her head pitching forward,"--Spotted it.
"As she pushed forward, straining into the abyss—she felt the freedom that he’d spoken of—the floating sensation of being held up, of being lifted above it all, of relinquishing herself and trusting that she would be accepted and respected—and that she could, in turn, accept and respect herself."--At the edge of oblivion we find peace.
"The problem was that she did need someone. She needed one person very much—the one inside her right now."--Hmmmm. I wonder what's going to happen to make her see past that limitation.
And you've thrown us the curveball of Snape being a Monulomens. Very very interesting :)
Of course I'm dying to see where you're going to go with this now. How will all these revelations play out for our favorite couple? Gah! Love this so much <3
well then, have you seen anything that resembles the cover description? - The only title that comes to mind is Deviations from Anma Natsu, but my country changes lot of covers for the books, so....moot point
she might not even need it - damn it, ok happy about that, but still...that would be hot scene :D
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Ok, fantastic, hot chapter. I still have trouble focusing on sex though.
I just love so many metaphors and descriptions that I would be c/p most of the chapter, really no point of that. Great visuals!
I also love the mutual development of emotions and her realisation. Her growth from self-centered to the actual person who takes into her surrounding and respect wishes and needs of others.
He was . . . beautiful. - I love this realisation. It shows how much she matured.
But then he pulled away, and she stopped breathing altogether. Her insides screamed, pleading with him to come back. But he had done what he had set out to do. - and I love how he uses sex to teach her very important lesson in life :) I'm just wondering if she really managed to learn it?
Great addressing to the paradox of gaining control by relinquishing it completely. It is actually one conundrum I liked to discuss when I was doing that research that was stopped. It is one and the same with strength in showing weakness.
Motulomens - ok, I'm not familiar with the term, is this akin to empath?
she had the terrible sense that his pain might not derive from what had been done to him . . . but what he had done to others - oh, this is just heart-breaking :'(
The whole ending is so bitter-sweet.
Love this chapter very much <3 Until the next one, take care of yourself :*
Love&Kisses&Hugs xxxx
Ah, we finally get to the book! I still need more information :) I take it Snape found it fairly interesting.
And the altercation with Ginny was just . . . insane. WTF is her problem? Was the situation not spelled out for her beforehand? Don't get me wrong, I found it totally believable; Ginny obviously has some deep seated issues. Maybe she needs some spanking therapy to sooth her soul. :)
Her exhalation was a fluttering purr of pleasure. Somehow . . . inexplicably . . . life felt good.--Life's like that :) and I like this sentence.
it had become everything. Yet with the magnitude of her loss, it had felt woefully inadequate, incapable of fulfilling her, of providing for her on any level.--I love this.
As though their bubbles of solitude were merging, uniting them in isolation, separate from the rest.--Yeeees!
His hypervigilance meant that they could engage in the trivial without fear.--This whole part was great. The idea that Snape is their (and her) stolid rock of protection is absolutely brilliant.
Love the end. She needs her Snape medicine. Come to think of it, so do I. More please :)
Ch16 - Loved the description of Snape in this - the ever vigilant watcher - and think that, had JKR not killed him (cow), that is how he would have gone on - ever watchful, allowing the young to feel safe, even if it is a false safety. SP
Ok - so having a little more than appropriate violent thoughts at Ginny. Yeah Hermione may have made a mistake and taken things too far but that is no way to treat someone. Not sure what resolution you plan to bring this to, but please don't let Ginny win.
You didn’t let him comfort you? - why would I? I have perfect Slytherin at home ;)
don’t worry, I wrote it, I’m weirder ;) - there was a strong metaphor in that sentence and all I found it is sexy ;)
Your brain is perfect! - thank you :*
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Now I'm intrigued to know what book did you had in mind (if it is something from the Muggle literature) :)
It wasn’t something she’d ever cared about in the past - I just love how her sexuality is waking up, but it is more than that, she is growing up and emerging as an adult
that she’d spent her entire mirror time visualising being torn apart by his fingers, shredded by his teeth - ugh, I just love her visual...yes please :D
Indeed, she’d somehow ‘earned’ her freedom as a result of their latest liaison. - why do I have the feeling that her "freedom" was more an excuse, his need to distance himself at least a bit from what is going on? A way for him to keep the shreds of his sanity in check? For him, it is a tool, just like the flogger.
It was nothing really. Just a bookmark. A brass stem with the head of a snake. - oh, my dear - it is everything ;)
she felt there was something here for her. Something worthwhile. - I love the parallel between them, so subtle, they both don't have another home.
wondering if it was how she, Ron and Harry had appeared not so long ago. - great description of disassociation
As though their bubbles of solitude were merging, uniting them in isolation, separate from the rest. - I love it, two pariah's
She had previously considered his stern vigilance to be unnecessary. - but it is necessary, more than just what she saw. He is still in a hostile environment, he cannot allow himself to relax, still hunted and knowing that attack is around the corner. More than that, he is stubborn, even spiteful...he is the embodiment of silent resistance, a judgement to counter their constant hatred and hostility. They didn't break him and he won't let them come what may but they can't break him. In a way, it is the only thing he has left with, and he is rubbing it in their face...a salt to the wound.
Whipping Snape, naked, in his bedroom. - love it <3
I love how you captured Ginny, I know many people like her but she is just as you described her - insecure and mean, jealous.
Friendships needed work. - true, but the true friendship wouldn't raise this issue, Ginny is not the friend, not a real one...
Face crumpling in realisation, she dropped the towel before turning and plunging into his arms. - I am melting...so lovely...so telling
Fantastic chapter. Can't wait to see what is going to happen next...maybe the shredding of that newly purchased undervear?
Until the next chapter, take care of yourself :* <3
Love&Kisses&Hugs xxxx
This chapter made me cry. :o(
I feel bad for everyone. Ginny, Hermione, Snape.
Beautiful.
Best chapter ever!!!!!