Heeheeheeheeheehee! (That's my naughty laugh.) Such a delicious setup. You have my full attention. I need more debauched/rude Snape in my life. Point penance leaves the door wide open for all things devious. I can't wait to see where you go with this. Are you going more dark than dirty in this one? No, wait! Don't tell me. That might give too much away.
Fav bits--
Ink on fibre. --Love this.
shrouded in a collar of mist--Awesome description.
he stopped writing to spear his quill into its holder-- Spear is so perfect here.
The upward jerk of his eyebrows punched home the question.--Oh god, you're killing me with with these words! So good. <3
(Store room--one word.)
It was like flirting with a shark.--Hahahaha! This actually made me laugh out loud. The accuracy is hilarious.
She felt herself swaying with the labour of her breathing.-- Excellent manifestation of her panic. Brilliant.
(attracting uniform hated from her housemates--hatred?)
You know I'm already dying for the next chapter. I'm going to be completely distracted until she comes all over him :) Need more!
Oh that's good. Can't wait to see where you'll take us with this one.