I've been sitting here all evening trying to think of something clever to say, and I tell ya, it's just not happening. Hermione really overthinks stuff. It's good sometimes, but in this instance I'm not sure if it's good for her or just going to drive her 'round the bend. Thanks for the answer about quim by the way. It was interesting to read your thought processes and I wouldn't have thought to approach it the way you did, so that was food for thought.
I think there's something to be said for the way Snape is going about this. He is clearly getting something out of it. And really, it could be just about anything. This is now bordering on D/s and I'm keeping my fingers crossed there's something to my educated guess.
Is Severus fulfilling an undisclosed need of his own? Is he subtly training Hermione under the very credible but dubious guise of discipline and point redemption? Does he have ulterior motives for going about it this way? Isn't he afraid she'll say something? I can imagine the fallout if she tried to. Oh boy, I don't even want to go there.
Your mental twists and turns in this story make my head spin. It's like a labryrinth for sure, and god only knows where this merry-go-round is going to end up. Hopefully right side up with everything and everyone intact. I love happy endings. *Hint* LOL Just kidding, sort of.
Aaaaaaaah! That wasn't enough. I still need more. And now you've introduced me to a new fetish: Bondage by blouse entrapment. All the privacy of a changing room with all the access you've come to know and love. Mmmmmm. Shirt sex.
And now you've introduced us to some possible plotty reasons for Snape's actions. (Damn you for interrupting my sex with thought!) And now I'm wondering more about the reasons behind his efforts. (Why would you make me do that? We were having such a nice time with dirty Snape.)
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hands a pale knot against the small of his back.--Love this visual.
The suggestion that she’d brought all this upon herself was insulting--She has a short memory, doesn't she? That's exactly what she wanted.
Hermione frowned. For some reason she found this even more insulting.--Hahahaha!
Snape frowned as though it were a word he’d never encountered before—one he’d never entertained.--I don't know why this cracked me up so much, but it did. :)
Hermione was grateful that her humiliation was currently hidden within what could only be described as a tunnel of shame.--Bhahahahaha! Oh god! I've been a bad girl and I need to be locked in a tunnel of shame.
—as though she’d accidentally discovered a person buried within that cold shell.--Love this realization.
"Both female openings are incredibly amenable to manipulation . . . to insertion.”--Unh! Damn straight!
"Two bucks—stags, fighting for supremacy inside the ductile arena of her body.”--So hot. And ductile is going in my word notebook.
face boiled like a dumpling by the hectic rasps of her steaming breath--Hahahaha! Oh gods! Perfect simile.
He had serviced her. And he clearly wanted her to know it.--Hot damn. He can service me anytime he likes. I loved this whole wiping his fingers bit. Forcing her to own up to the visceral reality of what just happened (especially since she was essentially hiding the whole time) was wickedly hot.
As she turned, her cardigan suddenly buffeted her in the face. “Return it to your grandmother,” he muttered. “She needs it more than you do.”--Hahahahaha! Perfect ending. :D
You know I'm already salivating for the next chapter. (I won't say what my pussy is doing.) I'll practice my shirt-restraint sex positions in the meantime.
you do give him a lot of leeway! - do I? Anyway, they are on their "third date", so yeah, he is switching to foreplay ;)
I’ll be interested to see what you think after this chapter. - I could tell you here, but it will be clearly visible from my further comments ;)
in his own fucked up way - I'm not so sure of his way is fucked up, but you'll get what I mean by that later in comments ;)
the trophy? Hardly ;) - now you got me all heated up for his POV, and I know that his POV would mess up things royally, because (and I can't believe I'm saying this!!!) this story is so great from her point of view. Revealing his motives would dampened it considerably at this point and through the better part of it, I think.
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as though it would be naïve to dismiss his intentions so easily - I agree with this, even if he's doing this only for pleasure shakes, it is too much of a mind game to be pure straight line :D
But could it equally evidence his own derailment? Was this, in fact, a manifestation of his own trauma, enacted or projected onto her? - I love this, and there are slight possibility that she is right. Then again, observing from different angle, one that she can notice but with great difficulty is parallel between their positions. She is Head Girl, that is position of responsibility, and expectations from her, from student body from teachers lay on her shoulders. On the shoulders of a girl who just went through the war, level-headed as she is, war is traumatic experience. And suddenly she's just supposed to "fit back in", like nothing happened? Isn't that something he went through in his youth?
If I adopt that perspective, he's still in same position he was during his life as a teacher and double spy. He's still not free, leading the school is more of a dance on a tight rope than true feel of power. He still has to bow his head on occasion, to tiptoe around various red tapes, to be careful not to anger those who pour the funds in to the school account, to keep things going. Not really freedom or a free reign, more of a servitude.
And for either of their positions, which are not that much of a different, sex is perfect outlet. She can't deal with much more pressure, no matter what she thinks. And, he can't afford to lose control, not anymore and not again. In a way they are perfect match.
in fact they’d occurred to date mostly without her consent - self delusion is a marvelous thing! There is a "small" matter in being dominated...you have to decide and to surrender, you have to allow it to happen. And to enjoy it, you have to desire it. But she is "typical" example of repressed personality (brains or no brains), concerned more to fit in to the boundaries of the socialy accsepted normes then to be her true self. There is japanese phrase "live your life to the fullest" which translates to being bold to do/experience what you want without regret even at the price of public condemnation. She is absolute opposite of that saying, and he is twisted and distorted version of it.
her book back . . . and her wand . . . and her freedom - odd order of things and priorities, wouldn't you say so? ;)
I love his mind games :)
No it doesn’t. It requires a willingness to surrender. - be still my heart! I love how he's toying with her! It does require thrust, and a loads of it. By her behaviour so far...she trust him more than she thrust herself. More to the point she is more honest with him than she is to herself.
Then he stopped. - I just love this bit, it is so telling.
His emphasis on each ‘p’ word, was driven home by simultaneous thrusts from his fingers into both holes, making her whimper. - fck! *runs away to fetch a bucket of cold water*
But she didn’t—she was positive she didn’t. - she's thinking with her head instead accepting herself.
made her wonder what she really knew of herself, her true desires - thank you :D
leaving both holes shuddering and ticking, and surprisingly bereft. - ugh, his "speech" and entire scene...*pours the bucket of cold water over head*
“Are you all right, Miss Granger?” - BINGO! ;)
He had serviced her. And he clearly wanted her to know it. - fantastic!
“Return it to your grandmother,” he muttered. “She needs it more than you do.” - hahahahahaha :D
Oh, and yeah, I still stand behind all I said to the previous chapter, whether you intended that or not, we'll see if you'll come up with some plot to turn things around the bend, knowing you - probably you will :D
Jesus. Fucking. Christ. He's an imaginative bastard, I'll give them up. And he's 'opening' her up to the pleasures of debauchery very nicely. And for points, to boot. I do wonder what he's getting out of it. Oh, don't mind my pun. I had to return the favor.
I honestly *must* ask you what allure the word 'quim' holds for you and a number of other writers. I respect your right to use it, but I've trained myself to insert 'pussy' or in this case, 'cunt' in place of it because I find it so grating. Is it something that is popular in the British Isles to use in the vernacular? Just curious if it's a writer's preference or if it's regional. I've never, in my entire life, heard female genetalia referred to as 'quim' (shudder), hence the curiousity.
I wonder why he made her keep her head inside the sweater. How odd, but I guess it kept her trapped. You use some very good analogies which I find is hard to do once so many are over used. They're very apt.
This chapter really had me on edge with the depravity, and I had to wait until my yapping family had gone to bed to properly enjoy it. Thanks for the great read. I thoroughly enjoyed their point-making session.
Well, Headmaster, it seems you've made some 'head'way har har. It's amazing how he's messing with her at the same time teaching her something about her own sexuality. With Snape, there's almost always a lesson in what he shares with others. I can see him being attracted to her while still getting off on the humiliation and domination, lording the points over her like the greasy, snarky, sarcastic and sour bastard he is. I like my Snape able to keep others off balance. And his position makes it all the more forbidden.
Wow. Intensity overload. I was getting comfortable with the Severus from the last few stories, the one who was all "I'm actually really afraid of being hurt so I'll just act like a prick, to everyone, especially Hermione". This Severus, is truly frightening. Looking forward, I think, to see where this story goes. Thanks for sharing your talent.
I can assure you that, despite current appearances, it’s going to have more depth than that (at least I hope so!). - I wasn't expecting anything less from you ;)
Let me know if you feel it falling down that hole. - Don't worry, I'll be first in line to tell you, but at the moment is seems like this is just the courting, I'm waiting at least foreplay for that judgement ;)
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In a way he is placing her in a same position he was in, at least partially, the part of the collective and outcast simultaneously. At the same time, he is closing the circle for her, returning her to the same possition where she was before she became friend with Harry and Ron. It still begs the question is he just playing with her or is he trying to give her a unique perspective? Even through the books they are the same and absolute opposites in a same time, she succeeded where he failed but everything is quite the same. They remind me a bit of yin and yang symbol.
He also gave her a shift of focus, instead of rule-breaking he's forcing her to focus on herself. Maybe even to truly face herself for the first time, she does desperately try to live up to image she has in her head, more than who she trully is. In general, Severus is force to be recon with, but along the lines with my previous statement, I have nagging feeling that for her he is a bizarre form of reflecting surface.
No point deductions. Please. No points./Points reward. Please. More Points. - Oh you are so mean to her, he's playing her hot and cold, you made it sound so juicy it is sinful. Oh, and yeah, no way in hell he'll give her points for regular work :D
I had been in the process of informing you of Professor Slughorn’s absence - "lucky" coincidence or quite deliberate one? My bet is on the later.
I just love how he is toying with her during class. And this confirms a bit my theory that he indeed needs a bit of thrill, a rush of hiding a secreet by exposing it for everyone to see (E.A. Po and "Hidden in plain sight" comes to mind) ;) Also, pushing on her limits is added bonus :D
“I would ask that you inform me before doing anything like . . . like you did last time.” - hahahahaha, she does have a death wish, hell she's dancing tango with the death itself.
“No.” - ugh, shivers down my spine! He does not disappoint.
Either he was incredibly short sighted - you made me laugh
What a delightful and steaming hot lesson :D And that's what it is, a lesson. he is teaching her! Brilliant!!!! And what a lesson, makes you want to return to the "school bench" :D
No point in c/p entire scene on the table, allow me to quote Ron "bloody hell, that was brilliant!"
Perhaps the aim of all of this really was to fuck her up. - or set her free ;)
He lifted the heel of his hand to his mouth, sucking it as he watched her, before flicking the cuff of his shirt back down. “You do squirt.” - unghhhhhhh, ahem, and what happened to his frock coat? I don't recall him attempting to clean it, just taking it with him :D
Can't wait for the next chapter!
Take care!
Hugs&Kisses xx
"ATHD – sounds like a disorder"
Hahahahaha! Whatever it is, I have it :P
Uuuuuunnnh! This chapter was so delicious. My dub-con heart is all aflutter. (And my perverse punishment loving pussy is weeping in ecstasy.) I love the current of intrigue running through the background too. Has Hermione not considered the idea that maybe he's just doing all this because he's a horny motherfucker? (I'm not saying that's my guess; I'm just being practical.)
Fav bits--
the vacant penumbra around her only adding to her humiliation.-- Love this description. Penumbra was perfect.
she was having trouble dislodging his deep resonance from her auditory memory, like schizophrenic utterances, urging her to do things to herself.--Me too! That's probably what the ATHD is. Auditory Trance Hypnosis Disorder.
"I doubt you could manage anything more . . . robust.”--Bahahaha! Seductive BURN!
"Aren’t you fortunate that I came at precisely the right time?”--Oh gods! Yes! Yes! Yes, I am glad. Thank you. Come again. (You have to read that last bit in Apu's voice.)
his index finger trailed lightly up and down his bicep--I don't know why this turns me on so much, but it does.
but knew that he would be absorbing her red flush like a vampire.--Love this description.
(Ten per cent of her deficit all at once--Percent is one word. But for a few seconds you made me question whether that was true.)
"From now on you will come to me for redemption.”--Oh. My. God. You are fucking killing me! Now I have to dry out my underwear. Thank you so much. (No, really. Thank you so much :D)
Now you've inspired me to schedule an appointment with the JGG. Good thing the house was empty today.You'd better update again soon. I may be patient, but my pussy demands satisfaction. She said to tell you, "More!" :)
This is horribly naughty and delicious and train-wreck-can't-look-away worthy! Lovely so far! And the humliation is perfect.
Chapter 2
-"...Then come to me." - Full body shivers.
-The tumb and ring finger of the other hand delicately touched together in what looked like anticipation. -I have no idea why this sentence made me hot, but it did. lol
-She would fall on him? He would watch and laugh? -Snort
-"Do you never venture inside?" - The taunts - bloody hell. I'm equally disturbed and turned on.
-"the pot of nectar that glistens before me now, ready to grease hit phallus, to receive him, to usher him directly into your tight heat, the enticement so absolute that he must return, more desperately each time." *fans self* Holy crap. Delicious.
-So, I think my jaw absolutely hit the floor when he shoved a finger up her pussy. I totally wasn't expecting him to get "phsycial" with her the very first time. Good shock factor! The statement "one index finger glistened with her juices" hot.
-The audacity of the five point reduction was good. Floored me again. Cripes!
More, more, more! Love!