You have so utterly bewitched me with this story. The vulgarity is stifling, but incredibly hot. The erotic words he spouts exhilarating. The emotions so amazingly raw and bleeding. I go back to my initial phrase of being equally parts disturbed and turned on. I cannot wait to see where this goes. As always, you’re brilliant.
Mmmmm, we're getting more meat in both the plot and the perviness. Yummy.
"It was pretty typical of her life now—watching the world pass by as a somewhat distant spectator, rather than experiencing it. And when their laughter hit her—tinny, echoing, like that from a television . . . she drowned it out . . . with another drink."--And that pretty much summarizes the giant hole she's living in all the time. She's either forcing an adrenaline rush or hiding from the truth. Either way, she's not facing her feelings.
"sitting, she could almost convince herself that she was only tipsy. But standing she was drunk—"--Hahahaha! Been there.
"recklessly so, aggressive even, like she could easily punch someone in the face."--I love the flailing freedom she's feeling. All that emotion struggling to get out one way or another.
"If Draco was about she might do it again. Pity he wasn’t. She suddenly found herself missing him, and not simply to put him on his arse again . . . strange." --:) No, not strange. She misses the rush of rivalry. He's good at pushing her buttons--just like Snape.
"What was he capable of? The thought made her so horny she found herself grasping her pussy and wincing"--:D Gee, that's not telling at all.
"How could his actions both oppress and liberate her?"--That's the million Galleon question. But I'm not seeing much oppression going on.
"There were warning bells going off all over the place but she was drunk and gave herself permission to ignore them."--Hahaha! Handy that. I usually just stick my fingers in my ears.
"Clumsily peeling off her clothes, she dressed in her nightie, her lust-and-alcohol addled brain considering it the best attire for apologising in,"--Bahahahaha! I love how puposefully obstuse she's being. Even when she's not drunk, she convinces herself to be sexy, but then, later, after the action, she goes all moralistic and acts as if Snape was the sole instigator. I'm sure this attitude is more common than I realize. How could it not be when society tells women to be sexy but then punishes them for being sexual. Instead of owning their power, they're taught to be ashamed of it. And Snape keeps feeding her fears, saying things that make her feel more object than human. While I find the animalistic nature of sexuality fascinating, I think for many people being compared to wildlife might raise some hackles. He's clearly keeping some kind of distance between them by referring to her response in such a detached manner, but his actions afterward convey the opposite, a need for attachment and humanity. Now, I'm rambling. Must finish reviewing.
"She made good time—or lost track of time."--Hahahaha! Perfect :)
"It was a warning."--Yeah, a sexy warning. Go in!
"Small drifts of smoke curled ethereally from his lips with each word."--MMmmmmm! You know how much I love smoky Snape.
(pickle you’d be in did you?--comma between in and did)
"from the ashes like some fraudulent phoenix—rekindling the hopes of the gormless Gryffindor initiates"--Oh gods, yes! Snape gets all alliterative after a bottle of wine. *drool*
"bringing with it an unpleasant vulnerability that she had enjoyed shedding, if only for a short while. She wanted that brash courage back, the one that had come so naturally, so easily, when she was younger—invoked by the constant barrage of dangers they had faced, and driven by their shared sense of purpose"--And there it is. The first glimpse of the underlying issue. I wonder how growing up under the constant threat of annihilation affects the developing adolescent brain. I would think it would instinctually link danger with sex, conditioned to entwine the two unless counter-conditioning is provided.
"And I see you’ve brought with you your fervid feminist principles?"--Bwhahahaha! Burn! I would have come back at him for saying something like that to me, informing him that feminism and sexuality are not mutually exclusive--but I might have been snorting to hard to speak for quite some time.
"You don’t have all the answers, Miss Granger.” He leaned closer. “You never did. I attempted to make that clear to you despite your desire to prove otherwise.”--Ah! And we have some of Snape's motive. Excellent.
"And now I believe you’re ready . . . to feel,"--And a bit more motive. Even more revealing.
"like a not-so-innocent Dorothy . . . a Dorothy pleading to the Wizard for courage, a heart . . . for home"--Oh fuck. Right in the feels. And such a great comparison.
"From behind her came the explosive sound of shattering glass." --Aaaaaaaahhhhhh! No, you can't end it there! Inquiring minds need to know all!
Just wanted to say a quick thanks for your writing. You write beautifully. Not revealing so much that you baby us as readers but also giving wonderfully descriptive language to ensure our imagination can be there and see your story unfold. Your characters seem true to life... or realistic... or believable... or whatever is the correct term for fictional characters that don't seem forced or fake. They remain true to the originals but have their own idendities... An expansion on what we have already and that could be true given the ptsd they must surly suffer from (given the events of the original stories). Really enjoying your stories so thank you!
in my head it is possible but it does require a bit of dexterity, and maybe a little bit of magic ;) - it is fine then, thanks for clearing the confusion :)
Hope you get that rest xxoo - thanks, I didn't get more rest but I did get more work, this is going to be loooong summer, I'm counting on you and OO to get me through it ;D
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OMFG I LOVE this chapter, it floored me completely :)
to fuck her up, to leave her confused and bewildered and questioning everything . . . including her sanity - I adore these after effects of Snape' sextherapy (where can i sighn for one, I'd find something for him to poke out or beat out, I prommise!!! :D )
But could it ever be restored in a healthy way? After everything that had happened, she doubted it was even possible for her to be knitted together into anything resembling a whole - I know it is the hardest part, but I just love this part of the therapy when you deconstruct, when you start thinking and questioning instead of hiding from yourself. But, I must confes, I am more in favour of your therapy method than for the one they thought us (no I'm not psychologist, but I went through training and even though psychodrama therapy as part of that training for working with highly sensitive social groups). And on that notion he did left her to leave maybe bit too open, too raw, without closure of freshly opened wounds, which would leave her seriously fuckt up.
“It was just the initial shock. You’ve earned heaps of points back. They just want to see you again—the younger ones especially. They really look up to you.” - What is she going to do now? Ginny if effectively taking away one of her "reasons", maybe the key excuse, to go back to him (I know there are still book and a wand). How she's going to justify to herself her why is she returning for more? :D
Her entire backside was covered with S-shaped bruises - mmmmm yummmy
mad brander - love this <3
“I did not claim that you could trust me.” - this made me laugh so hard
“Do you consider ‘liking you’ a requirement for the current process?” - ooooh yes she does! Either liking or hating, she has to justify his behavior somehow, if not, she can't justify her own reactions.
“Closer.” He pursed his lips around the word, entirely unperturbed. - hehehe brilliant!
“Whilst your fascinating feminist declaration is endearingly ardent,” he responded, his tone rich with sarcasm and condescension. “You have still failed to explain why I would wish to place my mark upon you . . . of all people.” - ouch! He just had to poke that wasps nest, did he? Bthw he is still acting like a doctor, keeping the patient at the distance, preventing it to form a bond and infatuation and shift the focus to that new "like" instead deal with the problem.
“Because you have no one.”/The amusement seeped from his eyes./“No one would want you.” - Ouch, ouch, ouch! I'm wondering what she's have to do next and how little points wil she earn for her efforts after this. If he just doesn't leave her hanging on for a long time. This is promising!
Well, he may be helping her but he is still Snape, this is bound to be fun! Btw hun, story is spot on but you failed miserably in the "dark Snape" department, in all your stories...this one is fluffiest of them all. ;)
I hope that you are ok.
Can't wait for the next chapter!
Love&Kisses&Hugs xoxo
Oohh shit she fucked up big time. Bring on the hardcore punishment for the next meeting!!!
Ooooooo! I told you. She's cruisin for a bruisin. The only problem with pushing people's buttons is sometimes you actually hurt them, and it looks like she found a weak spot. She'd better apologize, because Snape seems like the kind of man who'd shut her out over an offense like that rather than punish her. Redemption might be a steeper mountain than she's prepared to climb if she keeps biting the hand that spanks her.
was he seeking to achieve some bizarre redemption of his own?--I think he is :)
I loved the whole "branding bonanza" bit. I think he did it on purpose too, but it turns me on, so I'm in favor of him stamping his initials all over her (or me).
“Closer.”--Your anagrams are showing, Dr. Lecter. (Sorry, anagrams don't really apply, but it was the first line that popped into my head.)
“No one would want you.”--*Gasp!* Noooooooo. Way to make me side with Snape, Hermione.
UUuuuhhhhhh oooohhhhhh!!! She's really touched a nerve now. I think she's going to end up regretting what she said. And I wouldn't be surprised if he either tries to end the association by giving her wand back and the rest of the points or just giving her the wand back by having it on her pillow with a note or something, leaving her panicking. This does not bode well. On the bright side, balls are good for furthering the plot device!!
Ah, finally. It's about time he showed some sort of a feeling. As much as I love Severus in all forms, I was waiting for the moment she's going to make him show some emotions. Go Hermione. Can't wait for what's next to come.
Well first off, you get a thousand bonus points for calling this chapter Thighmaster. That might have been enough to make me love it on its own. But then you went and got all wonderfully dirty and poignant on me. Of course I loved the display position and spanking, but I loved the way he made her accept her own part in their game by making her do the riding. And of course the whole holding her at the end part was touching and revealing.
I could see in the earlier chapters that Snape was trying to impart some sort of lesson in his actions, but I couldn't tell if it was just a sexual lesson (teaching her about her body) or a lesson in learning to let go. But this chapter in particular was far more telling. The way he pushed her past her comfort zone and brought her to tears (and then praised her for them) indicates that his mission is actually one of healing. It's more than just teaching her to let go--he's bringing her back into the very emotions that have brought her the most confusion and pain. He's forcing her to deal with them.
That made me start to think about her actions up to that point. Although she put in the appearance of trying to be sneaky, she really hasn't been. It's more like she's been trying to get into trouble. Whether she's seeking the adrenaline rush of being bad or if she's subconsciously trying to get punished for her guilt, she purposely did things that would be considered reckless (especially for someone so regimented). She's pretty much screaming for help. And Snape is obliging. Albeit in an unorthodox manner. (Or is there sexual therapy that actually works like this? If there is, that a profession I'd be interested in pursuing.)
Fav bits--
who knew what she might have transfigured and tried to shove up herself otherwise--Bahahahaha! Oh, honey, you don't have to transfigured them first :P
How was that possible? How did he incite conflict in even her most primitive impulses?--I love this question.
nothing more than the forced opening of another callow neophyte--This was great, and callow neophyte was delicious.
She would gladly risk the head injury to avoid the mortification flopping around inside her like a dying fish.--Love this description (and the sentiment).
Hermione found herself on the verge of suggesting that he do the same--Hahahahaha! DoitDoitDoit! And this is yet another example of her need for self destruction, as that would surely bring on his wrath. I'm impressed she stayed silent.
Remorse? What fucking remorse?-- :D I'm glad she's being honest with herself.
When she’d Obliviated her parents she had chosen survival . . . and the cold rejection that came with it.--This whole part about her parents and the reflection (and blame) she associates with them was both revealing and beautifully sad.
I'm curious to see where Snape takes her next--what scab will he pick off and what will he reveal about himself in the process. Besides saving her from her own self-destructive ways, I don't know what his angle is yet.
yes, but there might be a reason for that ;) - since you are the writer I'm more than sure there is a reason behind everything ;)
this one’s definitely more smutty than plotty - I like smutty, I have nothing against smutty :D
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I just love her inner mussing. She's definitely overthinking it. Nice description of the awakening of her sexsuality. And nice dilemma to put her in, sex for the sake of sex, pure physical satisfaction vs involvement of any kind.
He’d turned her away the last two times she’d gone to see him, citing a busy schedule—although he hadn’t looked particularly busy. - hahahaha, sly snake :Dhe keeps her on the edge and waiting for her to be desperate enough ^-^
an electrical super-highway, sending shockwaves rippling through her entire body - just love this description
Spank? How old was she? Five? - yeah I could ask her that too, but from different reasons :D
“This will give you an opportunity to reflect upon the nature of your remorse.” - love this bit
There was no reason for her to continue to feel guild-ridden, whatsoever./But she did. Of course she did. It was her default state. It had been for a long time. - I'm just going to grin, widely :D
And whilst she wasn’t under any illusions about whether this was normal sex—the sort of thing that she would do with someone she loved - and why not?
But then she heard him speak again, one word, “Good,” murmured quietly, followed by his palm soothingly rubbing her burning rump. - awwwww :)
It was his mouth—it had to be—a sinuous pressure, impossibly soft and feathery against her clitoris. - ok I know I'm overworked and almost completely braindead (which is obvious from my comments) but I have problem visualising this scene, the physics of it to be precise :/ I adore it, I just have problem releasing how is it possible from his position, based on where she is and where his hands are, wouldn't she feel him shift?
What Snape had done—what he was still doing—was undoubtedly wrong but something about it gave her permission . . . permission to feel. - love it <3
If her previous orgasm was akin to a possession, this was an exorcism - ughhhhhh, fantastic!
she suddenly felt the sensation of her clothes wrapping back around her body. She’d forgotten them. - this is sweet :)
I know you are used to different type of comments from me, but I had two exhausting days. I hope next time I'll be more...me.
Can't wait that "next time", btw ;)
Love&Kisses&Hugs <3 :*